The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree wi

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Present day education system and the way of our lives prefer quantity over quality. Everyone tends to be in a rush and compete for better results amongst his peers and outshine them. But when we look back to the past, great feats were never achieved as a lone man but as a group of individuals or as a team. Hence inhibiting team building and networking skills at a young age will help people grow into a better leader irrespective of the field looked upon. The aircraft Airbus A380 is an engineering marvel which is able to carry over 800+ passengers across distances which couldn't even be imagined a 100 years back. Huge feats such as these is never a single person job. When looking at the aerospace sector a group of designers, manufacturers, quality assurance team, and a media outreach team all work together, where every team report to their head and they correspond with the leader of the particular project or company. With the absence of cooperation and networking skills among colleagues amongst working individuals in various fields, humanity wouldn't have advanced in all those fields as it is today. Futhermore, leadership roles in important fields like industry, military, and especially government are vital for any countries growth and one cannot afford to make mistakes as there is a lot of things at stake. Working in a team provides multiple perspective to a same prompt, which can never be possible to know of through self introspection. This is the same reason why representatives of the people in a democracy speak about policies and matter of discussions and try to amend or reframe any bill/scheme to be implemented. Such a fool proof working cannot be achieved if there aren't anyone to cooperate with and unanimously deciding their will. All this being said, there are few specific cases where veto exists of one person to another which might not exactly play well. A person X in a particular industry might propose a solution to some problem which would have been discussed amongst his own colleagues, but criticism or suggestions from another discipline must always be taken as a suggestion and nothing more. As the person X and his team are well versed and familiar with their discipline, opinions and and suggestions from others cannot be forced upon them as their point of view might not exactly be valid. Eventhough opinions might clash and it better not be taken serious from an industrial point of view, the same does not apply to every other leadership role where cooperation and introspection among the team is the top most priority which is very much needed for leaders of the future generation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Hence,
...as a group of individuals or as a team. Hence inhibiting team building and networking...
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... 800+ passengers across distances which couldnt even be imagined a 100 years back. Huge...
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Suggestion: wouldn't
...individuals in various fields, humanity wouldnt have advanced in all those fields as it...
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...especially government are vital for any countries growth and one cannot afford to make mi...
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...oof working cannot be achieved if there arent anyone to cooperate with and unanimousl...
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Suggestion: and
...amiliar with their discipline, opinions and and suggestions from others cannot be force...
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Message: Did you mean 'betters', 'wells'?
Suggestion: betters; wells
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, look, so, well, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2185.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 447.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88814317673 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72547315796 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570469798658 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.7004709559 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.5625 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9375 23.4991977007 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.4375 5.21951772744 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.97078651685 20% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147013449966 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464050991447 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0344388097548 0.0758088955206 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147013449966 0.150359130593 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667264976115 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 100.480337079 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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