The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Young people are the future for a country. How they will be trained in their juveline period, they will work with that in their adulthood when they will lead the important sectors of a country like government, industry or every other fields. This issue claims that young people should be trained with a sense of co-operation rather than competition for the best preparation of future society. I mostly agree with the claim for following too reasons.
Firstly, instilling co-operation can make a young people more responsible and morale which eventually help them to lead their responsibility . For instance, a student who have to work in a group where different catagories students are present, she or he needs to modest to the group member, aware of his duty and also he will learn how to manage people for achieveing one dream. In adulthood, when this student will enter in his job life in an industry sector, he can cope up with different levels of employees and manage them to gain the company's success. In addition, our governmental system is democractic which actually based on co-operation among mass people and leaders. For example, a leader who can co-operate with their people, he can elicit the best result from the society. This training of helping and collaborating with others will not rise imminently rather it needs to practiced and the starting should be at the very young age of a person.
Secondly, competition makes a yound people selfish and eventually he will be rapacious and decadent for achieveing his goal. For example, a student with jealousy in his young life for getting good grades in his exam paper will turn out that he will have the greedyness to hold for a position or even he will take fallacious steps to get in the position of leadership in government, industry, or in any fields. Moreover, he will be more focused on fulfilling his own dream rather than co-operating with the people he is working for. Thus, the total system may fall due to the wrong leaderhsip and society will not get any advantages. And this competition practice should be discouraged from the beginning.
It is true that sometimes competition makes a person to take necessary steps and dream to bigger extent. But comparing own success with others will eventually make a person narrow minded rather a person should compare his success with himself and go ahead for future with co-operating with others.
There is a proverb -" As you sow, so you reap" . As young people are considered as the seeds for future, so they should be trained with co-operation with others rather than competition.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, in addition, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2178.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 441.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9387755102 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73372844324 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480725623583 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 664.2 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.3433640278 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.631578947 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2105263158 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42105263158 5.21951772744 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210838349789 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0822742266023 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509281611182 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12898028074 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405464657043 0.0667264976115 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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