The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The prompt is recommending that through cooperation among young people the development of the society can be achieved over the competition between the young people. I would agree that the cooperation among the young people is vital for the functioning of a better society for two main reasons.
To begin, the cooperation among the students will help them to solve some major life problems. Teaching the cooperation will help in interacting with other people of different mind-sets and also respect their ideas too even if it doesnot match with their own idea. For example, in the college, the students are required to involve in many projects. The professors try to create a project team which usually consists of three five people. In the project team, professors might have two brillant students with other average scoring students. This will help the students to interact with other students and together come up with the solution for the project. This will prepare each and every student to adjust with other students. For illustration, one student may be good at studies but poor at logical thinking and vice versa. In this situation, if they cooperately work together, they can produce good results. However, if they don't involve each other in their tasks then the project might fail. Here, the student with good analytical skill can help the other student who is having less less analytical skill. Also, the student who can communicate to a larger audience the project solution can show-case their idea to the public. Likewise, when these students start working in a company they will have to work with people having different perspectives, different analytical ang logical thinking etc. Thus, the cooperation among the students will create the best results.
Further, competition will create serious issues among the young people if it is not properly handled. For instance, the students when they join some organisation. There will be many situation were they have to cooperate among other employees rather than compete with them. The project team will be having many young employees. When there is any task given to certain young employee, they have to interact with others about their solution and come up with the best one. Instead if they compete amon themselves and try to solve the problem, they might miss some important aspects which other employees could have catched. When this project is handled by a single person, then that particulat person might have solved the problem with his perspective, but there will be many other aspects to consider. Thus, the competition among young people might serious issues.
Nonetheless, the healthy competition is always required to succeed in anything. The healthy competition will not involve suppressing others, but making their life better than they were previously. For example, the students should have a healthy competition while scoring marks. When a student secures third place in some sports, then he or she should work hard to secure the first place in the next game. This doesnot mean we are competiting with others. Here, this means that we improving ourselves with the better version, but the prompt just says about the competition and not a healthy competition. Thus, there are many such cases where cooperation among the young people matters a lot in building the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 931, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... produce good results. However, if they dont involve each other in their tasks then ...
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Line 3, column 1085, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: less
...an help the other student who is having less less analytical skill. Also, the student who...
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Line 3, column 1085, Rule ID: LESS_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Non-standard use of the comparative or superlative. Did you mean 'less less', 'less little'?
Suggestion: less less; less little
...an help the other student who is having less less analytical skill. Also, the student who...
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Line 6, column 178, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun situation seems to be countable; consider using: 'many situations'.
Suggestion: many situations
...y join some organisation. There will be many situation were they have to cooperate among other...
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Line 6, column 470, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
...solution and come up with the best one. Instead if they compete amon themselves and try...
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Line 9, column 70, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...etition is always required to succeed in anything. The healthy competition will n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, likewise, may, nonetheless, so, then, third, thus, while, as to, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 12.4196629213 209% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 12.9106741573 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2813.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 545.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16146788991 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53362273659 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.434862385321 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 834.3 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3335231246 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.7419354839 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5806451613 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90322580645 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157179668856 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0538283009318 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434694806872 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130106157427 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601104793305 0.0667264976115 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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