The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The human race has come a long way from the very early man's society. A nation's progress and prosperity depend on the current generation of young people. Therefore every nation should prepare its young generation for a better society. The argument in the prompt asserts that society has to instill a cooperative-based mechanism rather than a competitive one in the minds of the current generation's kids. I agree with the prompt for two reasons.
Admittedly, I do concede that a healthy competitive spirit will bring the best in some scenarios. For example, a school science fair competition which awards only the first prize for the best project. Every student tries to be the best to achieve this prize. This sort of mechanism is required in the child's early life to make him realize the importance of being the best and how it can impact the people around him.
However, the real world is not that simple. Every government and industry is very complex and to achieve a balance and a smooth-running, cooperation is the key. For example, if we look at how a nation works on a higher level, there are the police, engineers, lawyers, and doctors. For example, if an accident had taken place and to catch the wrong ones, the police departments come into the picture, and the doctors save the injured by operating, the lawyers take care of the legal issues. Had any of the departments did not cooperate well and worked independently, the issue would not have been solved and justice would not have been achieved.
Secondly, with the current global scenarios and events in the play, it is clear that we are going to face numerous problems for our survival. Ranging from the increase in the emission of carbon dioxide, increase in global warming, depletion of natural and renewable resources, it is high time that we, as one race, have to protect our mother earth. And to do so, all the leaders throughout the world have to arrive at a consensus on the plans to live a happy and peaceful life. In these inexorable scenarios, if the leaders of the nation were not prepared and accustomed to this cooperative mechanism, things are going to be very bad.
In conclusion, a cooperative environment is necessary for the leaders of the next generation for making the earth and habitable place. Yes, without competition, a free-market economy cannot work at its full strength. So, healthy competition along with cooperation when required is needed for making the earth a better place for tomorrow.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 152, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...the current generation of young people. Therefore every nation should prepare its young g...
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Line 3, column 215, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'try'.
Suggestion: try
...ze for the best project. Every students tries to be the best to achieve this prize. T...
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Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...of being the best and how it can impact the people around him. However, the real-world is not th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, as to, for example, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2092.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 432.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84259259259 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.624338541 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553240740741 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9238341282 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.619047619 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5714285714 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38095238095 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212062896724 0.243740707755 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589762046208 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545779106438 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11381336196 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524164635128 0.0667264976115 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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