The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The statement suggesting that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of corporation, not competition, could be agreed upon to a certain extent. It is true that the young generation is going to be the future of any country. Therefore, it is very important to instill proper education and, inculcate certain values that eventually benefit society and its people. Any organization or industry, nowadays demands ethics and leadership instincts that help the organization lead towards prosperity.
A true leader is known for his ability to deliver and, lead the team, or any organization efficiently. Changing modern times demand for someone who is capable of dealing with the current complex problems and, providing a solution that enables the proper functioning of any government, or organization. It is essential that we address to such issues of modern times and accordingly prepare the younger generation for it. Cooperation is one such problem in these modern times, which has a very deep impact on society and its people. The tendency of any individual to be cooperative is steadily declining.
With changing times, people have become less cooperative which has led to constant conflicts over time. Understanding the importance of cooperation is more important than competing. Sometimes being cooperative results in more beneficial results. Being cooperative does not mean one should stop competing. It is essential that we teach the young generation the difference between being cooperative and competitive so that they are well prepared for the future, which ultimately benefits society.
In conclusion, inculcating and educating the younger generation with a sense of cooperation, not competition is very important for them to be able to lead the government or, any other organization, efficiently and, ethically.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 183, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'Sometimes' is usually put after the verb 'being'.
Suggestion: Being Sometimes
...ation is more important than competing. Sometimes being cooperative results in more beneficial ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, if, so, still, therefore, well, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 58.6224719101 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1635.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 300.0 442.535393258 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12100233187 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 215.323595506 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526666666667 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7213381622 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300488095875 0.243740707755 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0937050097098 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0992246524523 0.0758088955206 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180684527844 0.150359130593 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0612276554587 0.0667264976115 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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