Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.
A society supports its influentialpeople to an extent that people constantly put efforts to become like them.However, these influential people/idols may not always deserve being worshipedby a huge population; they have a mass following due to a synthetic auracreated around them. The prompt suggests that one can judge the character ofmen and women of a society through observing its role models and idols. I agreewith the following claim due to the below three reasons.Firstly, a role model is a person, who is considered an image ofperfection and often people imagine themselves as that person in their heads inan attempt to be perfect. But it is not necessarily a good thing. For instance,if a person wants to become rowdy like some goons, he will definitely idolize apowerful person who takes advantage of their position. Therefore, this definitionof perfection in itself determines a lot about people who constitute a society.Furthermore,role models can be created using power and good publicity as well. Many peoplehide under a different face publically no matter how corrupt they are behindclosed doors. But this trend is not something that remains hidden for long. Forinstance, people in the USA considered golfer Tiger Woods as their idol in the early2000s. But a few years later, after an infamous scandal, the popularity of Tigersaw a severe downfall, which led to an end to him being a role model for mostof the people. Though he was still an exceptional player, but it did not helphim gain his reputation back. This is a great example of how a societycreates role models on the basis of an immaculate image and does not tolerate lowmoral standards.Lastly, inseveral cases, a person who is idolized and praised by people is not the mostgenuine man. Among the many instances, one such example is movie actors, whoare worshiped nationally. There are these artists who have various accusationson them along with criminal cases filed in their names. But does this makepeople think of them as any less of an inspiration? Well, probably not. Thisexplains a lot about the people who idolize such artists, as they do not seebeing a criminal that big or a deal. Hence, it reflects the character of thesociety like a mirror. People who can idolize and want to become like criminalsor corrupt people, most probably themselves are not genuine.On the other hand, some people may argue that, if people idolizesomeone because of any other reason such as their social image or philanthropicwork, it has nothing to do with the character of society as a whole. Though itmay look like a possibility, it does not reflect how morally corruptmethods of their idols do not affect them? Though their idols may be eloquentspeakers or exceptional footballers, ignoring their selfish and corrupttactics is not what a morally sound society can do.
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...nd idols, one can judge the character of men and women that it is comprised of. I...
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...he character of men and women that it is comprised of. I agree with the following claim due t...
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...ith the following claim due to the below three reasons. Firstly, role model is...
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...r and good publicity as many people hide under a different face publically not ma...
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.... For instance, people in USA considered golfer Tiger Woods as there idol in earl...
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...pularity of Tiger saw a severe downfall, which led to an end to him being a role ...
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...ople. Though he was still an exceptional player, but it did not help him gaining ...
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...s is a great example as how some society creates role models on the basis of an i...
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...observe a person whom people idolise and praise is not the most genuine man. One ...
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...xample is movie actors who are worshiped nationaly. There are these artists who h...
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...e variuos accusations on them along with criminal cases filed in their names. But...
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...This explains a lot about the people who idolise such artists, as they do not see...
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... as a mirror. People who can idolise and want to become like criminals or corrupt...
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...people, most probably themselves are not genuine. On the other hand, some peop...
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...someone because of any other reason such as their social image or philanthrophic ...
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...ook like a possibility, but does is not reflect how moraly corrupt methods of their ido...
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...elfish and corrupt tactics is not what a morally sound society can do.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, so, still, therefore, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2400.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 498.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81927710843 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49601866816 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497991967871 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 756.0 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.553195379 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 30.0 4.97078651685 604% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159296330312 0.243740707755 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0474082460068 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752815862136 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0432315717598 0.150359130593 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603897843714 0.0667264976115 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.