Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.
The writer claims that the best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that society chooses as its heroes or its role models because the heroes and role models reveal a society’s highest ideals. Although it is true that the heroes and role models reveal a society’s highest ideals, it is difficult to proclaim that is the best way because the society is more than just an ideal.
When the writer sketches the hero, the virtues that the society think it is valuable is projected into the hero. think about superman and batman, the most popular hero of all time. When they are living in a normal life, they stand on the exact opposite side, one living in poverty, work as a busy news reporter and the other living in luxurious, indolent silver spoon. However, when the danger approaches they wear there uniform and stand on the same side-justice. For the sake of the society, they do their best sometimes sacrifice their own valuables such as lover. From those heroes, people learn and remind themselves that justice is the highest ideals of the society.
The proponents of the statement contend that then it is the best way to examine the society because the heroes and role models are something people show respect and try to follow the path. As people are heading on the same way, it becomes the character of the society.
However, there are several admired heroes that people know deep down that it is impossible, an illusion. When we scrutinize superman and batman, there are something unrealistic about them. Superman is an alien from another planet and batman could hide his identity just by covering his face with mask and making his voice more husky. The statement that the proponents are making should be more specific : people are trying to run on the same track, but not everybody succeed the stay on track, sometimes they fail and sometimes they give up. when the majority fail to sustain their position, the ideal that the hero is trying to show will not become the character of the society.
Also, it should be acknowledged that the society is more complicated than heroes or role models. The society is reality, where the real people are living in and the reality always contradicts ideal. Would it be possible to imagine the us today just by examining the role models of us such as Lincoln or Washington? The characteristic of the society includes economic system and political system, which are all sophisticated and quite far from ideal. By living in a real world, the ideal sometimes transmutes.
In conclusion, it is agreeable that heroes and role models reveal a society’s highest ideals, but it is not the best way to seek the character of the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 114, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Think
...is valuable is projected into the hero. think about superman and batman, the most pop...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, in conclusion, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.5258426966 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2275.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 474.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79957805907 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48010365256 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.426160337553 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 723.6 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3857507886 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.333333333 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2380952381 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.512318172197 0.243740707755 210% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151319012216 0.0831039109588 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.209248244718 0.0758088955206 276% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.327361984448 0.150359130593 218% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.251823252642 0.0667264976115 377% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 11.8971910112 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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