Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which

One may agree or disagree with the claim. The fact is that such statement is used to motivated the youth and it must not be taken in the literal context. I agree that a person should focus on the worthy goals and must work diligently.
Dreams can be of various types. But all dreams are not selfish. While some people dream of realistic dreams and hence to choose to work on it and give their potential to make their wish come true. On the other hand, some dreams are not realistic and the person knows that it is not possible to come true. It is a good advice that a person must follow his dreams, but it doesn't mean that we have to turn a blind eye towards everything else. There are lot many things to be considered before we simply start following our dreams. There are lot of factors which play a major role in man's success. For example, a person may dream of going to Mars, but it doesn't mean that he can go easily. Even if he has a lot of money and resources, still he may not be able to fulfill his dream. It will be better if the person can can focus on worthy things and work on it. This way, he could lead a happy life with his family.
On the other hand if a person dreams of starting a new company and if he is aware of the procedures required to do so, then he must not let anything to stop him from doing so. For such a person, the advice given in the argument would work wonders. Or a person may dream of getting a score of 340 in GRE. It can be achieved, the person has to just believe in himself and with proper guidance and hard work, such a dream can be achieved.
It is true that some successful people will always tell that a person must follow his passion,but there is a fine line between passion and a dream. A person may be passionate about his job and may dream of traveling the world. Moreover, we dream of many things during a day, it doesn't mean that we go after all of them. Thus,a person must know his limitations and focus on realistic things which are worth working.
Dreams keep on changing. A person who initially wanted to buy a car, after owning a car, might dream of a better car. Thus an advice to follow your dreams may seem to be motivational, but it needs to be taken in proper way and must not be followed blindly.

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Average: 1.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 312, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'good advice'.
Suggestion: good advice
... it is not possible to come true. It is a good advice that a person must follow his dreams, b...
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Line 2, column 371, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...a person must follow his dreams, but it doesnt mean that we have to turn a blind eye t...
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Line 2, column 652, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...rson may dream of going to Mars, but it doesnt mean that he can go easily. Even if he ...
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Line 2, column 811, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: can
... dream. It will be better if the person can can focus on worthy things and work on it. ...
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Line 3, column 21, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e with his family. On the other hand if a person dreams of starting a new compan...
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Line 4, column 94, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , but
...ll that a person must follow his passion,but there is a fine line between passion an...
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Line 4, column 279, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...e dream of many things during a day, it doesnt mean that we go after all of them. Thus...
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Line 4, column 325, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , a
... mean that we go after all of them. Thus,a person must know his limitations and fo...
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Line 5, column 119, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ing a car, might dream of a better car. Thus an advice to follow your dreams may see...
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Line 5, column 124, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'advice'.
Suggestion: advice
... car, might dream of a better car. Thus an advice to follow your dreams may seem to be mo...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'hence', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'thus', 'while', 'after all', 'as to', 'for example', 'it is true', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.173913043478 0.240241500013 72% => OK
Verbs: 0.186335403727 0.157235817809 119% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0745341614907 0.0880659088768 85% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0517598343685 0.0497285424764 104% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0745341614907 0.0444667217837 168% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.109730848861 0.12292977631 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0393374741201 0.0406280797675 97% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.17935572549 2.79330140395 78% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0331262939959 0.030933414821 107% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0931677018634 0.0997080785238 93% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0538302277433 0.0249443105267 216% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.00621118012422 0.0148568991511 42% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2262.0 2732.02544248 83% => OK
No of words: 439.0 452.878318584 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15261958998 6.0361032391 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.58838876751 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.246013667426 0.366273622748 67% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.123006833713 0.280924506359 44% => More words length more than 6 chars wanted.
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0865603644647 0.200843997647 43% => More words length more than 7 chars wanted.
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0523917995444 0.132149295362 40% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.17935572549 2.79330140395 78% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 219.290929204 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455580865604 0.48968727796 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.0704214857 55.4138127331 90% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6194690265 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.56 23.380412469 75% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4002916656 59.4972553346 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.48 141.124799967 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.56 23.380412469 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.6 0.674092028746 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.21349557522 192% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 29.8606833713 51.4728631049 58% => OK
Elegance: 1.03311258278 1.64882698954 63% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235626131575 0.391690518653 60% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0914961253653 0.123202303941 74% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0715440002569 0.077325440228 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.449623444156 0.547984918172 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.147342150725 0.149214159877 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893674011177 0.161403998019 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495081214041 0.0892212321368 55% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.294457460593 0.385218514788 76% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.100830884976 0.0692045440612 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162326331332 0.275328986314 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491956933086 0.0653680567796 75% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 10.4325221239 211% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88274336283 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 18.0 7.22455752212 249% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.70907079646 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 21.0 13.5995575221 154% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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