The prompt says that governments should support major cities financially so that they can thrive, and claims that cities are the ones that preserve and generate a nation’s cultural traditions. While I agree, in some extent, with the first part of the suggestion that government must ensure financial support to the major cities, I disagree with the assertion that cities are primarily the ones that preserve and create a nation’s traditions for two reasons.
To begin, I personally think that a government should pay special attention to their major cities when financing because cities are the major sources of their economical and developmental success. But other parts of the nation should not be ignored completely. It fact, it is a government’s responsibility to support every of their cities and villages, and not only their major cities, in every possible way so that they can function properly in the welfare of the nation. If a government only helps their major cities by financing them and abandon their peripheral cities and villages, even if major cities thrive, these peripheral areas might suffer and hold back the nation’s prosperity as a whole.
Second, in my opinion, rural and suburban areas are primarily the ones that preserve and generate a nation’s cultural traditions, not major cities. In fact, major cities are the ones where different traditions and cultures are mixed and adulterated. For instance, if we look at the major cities of the United Kingdom such as London, Birmingham, Manchester etc. we see that they are highly cosmopolitan. Millions of people around the world visit these cities everyday, millions of people from different nations and cultures move to these cities every year and settle themselves, sharing their cultures and traditions with English and other people, dilute the native English culture. On the other hand, small cities and rural areas of a country does not attract foreigners much. So, there is a little scope of culture adulteration, keeping their endemic culture and traditions untouched. Thus, if a government really wants to restore the nation’s culture and traditions, they should finance rural and suburban areas instead of major cities.
In conclusion, a government cannot just finance and ensure the preservation of a nation’s cultures and tradition. It takes a nation as a whole to preserve its cultures and traditions.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 459, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ple around the world visit these cities everyday, millions of people from different nati...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, really, second, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 58.6224719101 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2028.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 383.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29503916449 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80962999045 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45953002611 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 627.3 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.8839004553 60.3974514979 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.75 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9375 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.375 5.21951772744 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.455003658732 0.243740707755 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16131886386 0.0831039109588 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0929089042872 0.0758088955206 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300888603155 0.150359130593 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0850012215036 0.0667264976115 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 459, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ple around the world visit these cities everyday, millions of people from different nati...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, really, second, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 58.6224719101 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2028.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 383.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29503916449 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80962999045 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45953002611 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 627.3 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.8839004553 60.3974514979 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.75 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9375 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.375 5.21951772744 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.455003658732 0.243740707755 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16131886386 0.0831039109588 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0929089042872 0.0758088955206 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300888603155 0.150359130593 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0850012215036 0.0667264976115 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.