Imagination is the power to think about any particular thing and experience is the skill achieved by doing a certain activity for a prolong period. The claim however suggests that imagination is more valuable than experience citing the reason people without experience can imagine quixotic things which are not possible within the constraints of established methods. I think as much as experience is important, imagination without restrictions set by society has generated revolutionary ideas for the following reasons.
Experience is a really valuable asset and, in some cases, definitely more vital than imagination. In typical real-world scenario where people have to work within a set of established rules and regulations, imaginations with reverence to norms and attitudes can yield ingenious outcomes. For instance, an executive proposing a budget for a multi-national conglomerate has to know every set of principles that business has to follow. The revenue margin set by the authority, the new products and services to be introduced, recrudescence in some of the declining ventures, the expenditures of past years, the debt remaining to be paid and a host of other executive information. Without adequate knowledge on these issues, it’s not possible for anyone to propose a financial scheme for any business. Even if a budget is proposed without considering these factors, it is highly unlikely to get approved and can cause annoyance to the authority who might consider this as an act of insouciance regarding business rules and regulations. So, in this kind of situation experience can give the employee the knowledge to understand the importance of abiding the mandatory rules of the company and therefore work out a plausible solution. Being incognizant of these rules because of a lack of experience can be extremely costly in certain scenarios.
However, as much as these experiences are important, people who are capable of thinking out of the box, has awarded us with the most revolutionary ideas and invention throughout human history. Most of the achievements that we can take pride on, has significant contribution from ingenious minds whose thoughts engendered from the ability to liberate their minds from established habits and attitudes. For instance, nobody knew how the sun rotated on its own axis and rest of the planets orbit around the sun before Galileo put forward this proposal. But it was an extremely sensitive issue as the ecclesiastical community thought that, the earth is at the centre of the galaxy and the rest of the planet orbit the earth and any modification to this theory was considered sacrilegious. As a result, Galileo was incarcerated for the rest of his life for stating a truth and giving us the proper knowledge thinking against the established norms. For all the genius of Galileo, he couldn’t have imagined this without breaking the boundary set by the established set of habits and attitudes. Not just galileo, other revolutionary persons like, Thomas Edison was expelled from his school, for experimenting with chemical that felt like utter madness to the school authority. However, he continued his journey on his pursuit of finding the incredible things which freed human from the darkness of night and invented one of the most ubiquitous and important utilitarian things of modern days, the electric light. Had he not ventured into journey breaking the boundary set by the society we might still be living the darkness. So, in case of these inventions, thinking without the boundary set by society is more important than experience, because these type of inventions by definition, engender from breaking established habits and attitudes.
From the aforementioned facts, it can be said that although in some case the claim presented can be justified, it doesn’t hold water for the most brilliant human inventions and thus this claim can’t be considered as a well thought statement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...chieved by doing a certain activity for a prolong period. The claim however suggests that...
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Line 2, column 538, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ices to be introduced, recrudescence in some of the declining ventures, the expenditures of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, really, regarding, so, still, therefore, thus, well, as for, as to, for instance, i think, kind of, as a result, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 91.0 58.6224719101 155% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3323.0 2235.4752809 149% => OK
No of words: 629.0 442.535393258 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28298887122 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00798087137 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02350465058 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 309.0 215.323595506 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491255961844 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 1064.7 704.065955056 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.9665706773 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.045454545 118.986275619 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5909090909 23.4991977007 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.54545454545 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214228176797 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703546860683 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0985888806164 0.0758088955206 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153309536563 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125522867783 0.0667264976115 188% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 14.1392134831 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 48.8420337079 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 161.0 100.480337079 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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