Claim Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system Reason Laws cannot change what is in people s hearts or minds Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason

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Claim: Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system.
Reason: Laws cannot change what is in people's hearts or minds.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

The author of this claim states that laws are not enough to solve many problems of modern society because they cannot change people’s will. Despite the fact that it is not stated which specific problems the claim is referring to, I strongly agree with it. Nonetheless, I think that there is more than one reason why the legal system is not enough to end all problems of modern society.

First, it is essential to highlight the way in which the legal system could solve modern society problems. Since, as the author wrote, laws cannot change what is in people’s hearts or mind, their real goal is to prevent people from doing them. Even though laws themselves cannot change people’s will, the consequences of breaking them might make them vacillate about their decisions. Let’s consider for example the rate of abuses on women happening in italy in the last 5 years: after new laws have been made, the cases of abuse decreased substantially, but the problem is not yet solved. Laws are necessary to maintain order and peace in a society, but it is not enough, and maybe it will never be, to solve every problem.

On the other hand, it is also true that the reason stated by the author is not the only one. Sometimes it is not what is in people’s hearts or minds that drive them to break laws. The reality is that some people do not have any other choice other than that. Italy for example has registered a rising number of immigrants coming from Africa since 2016. The italian government was not able to handle such big numbers and it all precipitated in them not having a place to stay or any jobs to find. As a consequence, most of them started stealing or drug dealing. Laws cannot stop this problem either, but the reason why is evidently way different from the one stated by the author.

In conclusion, I would say that laws and legal system are not enough to solve every problem of modern societies. Whether driven by their will or forced by their current situation, people will always tend to break them.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, nonetheless, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1672.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 360.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64444444444 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34756900791 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519444444444 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9093655916 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.3529411765 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1764705882 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76470588235 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35496066601 0.243740707755 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109938476051 0.0831039109588 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0890361737063 0.0758088955206 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22253570642 0.150359130593 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106294686585 0.0667264976115 159% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 12.1639044944 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 100.480337079 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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