College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In developing and supporting your position be sure to ad

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College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

There are many jobs available in the market . There are versatile fields present and we have to choose one of them. Some of the fields have high demand , while some have low. Few of them pay very high salaries , others pay less salaries. We have to choose those types of study that have can prove beneficial for us in the present as well as in the future . I totally agree with the statement that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field .
We all our human beings and our ultimate requirement is money. We can purchase all the resources for us only because of this. So if we choose those jobs which are not available , how will we earn money for ourselves. This will result in a jobless situation which will lead to no money. Resultingly our living standards will lower , which can even affect our future generation. For instance , some of my friends had chosen civil engineering and few chose computer science. All of them finalized their subjects in accordance to their interests . But after completion of their graduation , my mates who chose computer science got admitted into jobs with a very nice salary , while those with civil engineering were still struggling to get one.
It is human nature that if we get some idea or approach will prove beneficial for us in the coming future , we tend to follow it. For example , I had one friend who was a lawyer in lower court. He was an average skilled advocate , but he was finding it very hard to find a respectful place with a high amount of money in his field . So at the end he shifted to data science, which is very demanding field nowadays. Students of different fields , in today`s times , have to learn some technical skills to get themselves aligned in the market . SO my point is that at the end when we have to shift to only those jobs which are available , then why can not we do it now .
Jobs are performed to earn money. We have not seen anyone who is doing any work due to his pleasure or to pass his leisure time. Since payment is our final want , so why not perform only those works which can give us high amount of wealth. Also , choosing a field in available and demanding jobs will be less struggling . If we will perform those jobs which are not demanding , how are we going to earn a living for our family and ourselves.
Some people may argue that if we have not can not take up any job according to our own interest , then there is an option of opening a startup of our choice. To clear this viewpoint, I would say that it is correct to open a startup . But opening a startup will not only include work of our interest , but we will have to indulge in works that are related to management , handling money , convincing clients etc. So ultimately we will be performing job of business administration, rather then working on jobs of our choice .
To sum up, I would say that we have to follow our passion. But if our passion is a part of something that will not be fruitful to us in the coming future , then we ought to adopt a wise decision by shifting our choice to some other field. In the latter case , we can still follow our choices . We can pursue our interests as our hobby during leisure time. At the end, we all live for money . So we have to find a way which can help us to earn them.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, still, then, well, while, for example, for instance, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.4196629213 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 92.0 33.0505617978 278% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2693.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 616.0 442.535393258 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.37175324675 5.05705443957 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98190197535 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3911379777 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.417207792208 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 858.6 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.2370786517 173% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.85660653 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.9428571429 118.986275619 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 5.21951772744 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 39.0 7.80617977528 500% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157164921058 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547302468723 0.0831039109588 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0792217605622 0.0758088955206 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104061797843 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556432796531 0.0667264976115 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 14.1392134831 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 48.8420337079 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.77 12.1639044944 64% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.81 8.38706741573 81% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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