Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education.

Education is the pillar of each nation. Many are the studies and plans made in order to improve it for better future citizens. One of the oldest means used by teachers is introducing competitions between students, therefore, pushing them to compete for having higher grades. Many are those who see that this approach has more drawbacks than benefits, however, I believe that rivalry between students broadens their learning capacities for several reasons.

The first reason is that competing and wanting to be the best is part of our human nature. Students improve better since they have a goal which is to improve their marks and why not be the best. It might seem that it limits their view on winning rather than learning whereas it is only a catalyst for the process of learning. In other words, it will push them to do more research, more work without giving up.

The second reason is that while being competitive, students tend to sharpen their abilities. They come up with efficient ways of improving their skills and enlarging their knowledge. They make plans on how to get the most with the least efforts. One of the best results is that they get to know their strength and their Achilles heel. Consequently, they will start enhancing both points.

The third reason is, throughout the process of hard work, students start to know what they like and what they want to pursue in the future. For example, I always competed with my friends in scientifical subjects. All along my researches, I found out that I was keen on these types of subjects and that I enjoyed researching them. Thus, I wanted to work on a field known for innovating which was engineering. Competition is one of the keys that define the desires of students and shapes their future.

Albeit being salubrious, I believe that it could be this way only if it is not overemphasized by teachers and society as well. This will be counterproductive and will erode the self-esteem of students. Competition should never be or become tantalizing.

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Average: 1.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, third, thus, well, whereas, while, for example, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1680.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 345.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86956521739 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67435250306 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56231884058 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 704.065955056 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.020402042 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.0 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4285714286 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0900156099304 0.243740707755 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0273108152859 0.0831039109588 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354681563121 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0515520173533 0.150359130593 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363950279986 0.0667264976115 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 14.1392134831 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 48.8420337079 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 12.1743820225 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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