Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The education process depends on too many factors that play an important role in determining the quality and the ease of it. One of these important factors are the environment in which students deal with each other and the way they are galvanized to do their tasks. In an unhealthy environment, a teacher encourages his students to work harder aiming to beat their colleagues to the awards given at the end of the semester or year. This how, a feeling of envy will be enticed in the characters of the students and therefore, they will not improve as well as they should. However, a healthy environment for education is not vacant of the competition between students, that is, they work to achieve high grades keeping in mind that the high grades they achieve is just an indicator of how much effort they have put during the semester, without considering beating their colleagues to the highest grades as a primary goal.
In such a healthy environment, good students are most galvanized and pushed towards putting more effort to grasp as much knowledge as they can. The best students always try to prove themselves and refuse to give up when having difficulties understanding some concepts. In a non-competitive environment, good students are more likely to lose vigor towards learning especially if they are learning something they are not very familiar with, this happens as they will be affected by their companions who are not so eager to learn in a non-competitive environment. On the other hand, they will try to excel in any topic they study even if it does not seem very easy to them at the first glances, in order to keep the same level with their companions who are more likely to be excited to put efforts to learn in a competitive environment.
Furthermore, we can use the example of great companies and institution as an evidence that competition is very healthy characteristic of education or work. That is, we see that the biggest companies always try to hire the best qualified employees, in order to improve the competition between employees and therefore, every employee will do his best to keep the same level of excellence of his colleagues.
Finally, when we imagine a healthy educational place, one of the first things that comes to our minds is the high-level material being taught to the students. This would be difficult to happen when the teacher is not encouraged by the level of students to get the level of the material higher. this is most likely to happen where the students are competing at a high level, so that they will be asking more questions to understand the concepts and the origins of every topic.
In a conclusion, a reasonable person would think that given that the envy feeling when growing between students exacerbates the learning process and make it difficult for the students to burgeon and so, it is better to get rid of any thing that would stimulate that feeling, including competition between students. However, considering the positivities a competitive environment give to the students such as the points mentioned above, we would think that this is better to be kept but in a healthy way.
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...hink that this is better to be kept but in a healthy way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, well, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2616.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 538.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8624535316 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83311437907 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433085501859 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 819.0 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 23.0359550562 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.7715287823 60.3974514979 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.5 118.986275619 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.625 23.4991977007 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.21951772744 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108998812659 0.243740707755 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0383414298794 0.0831039109588 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0273478494053 0.0758088955206 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0629665692398 0.150359130593 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0170380830786 0.0667264976115 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 14.1392134831 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.44 48.8420337079 95% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.2143820225 136% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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