"The concept of 'individual responsibility' is a necessary fiction. Although societies must hold individuals accountable for their own actions, people's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making."

In many respects, society always expect individuals to take full repsonsibility for their behaviors, so that when unpleasant events occur, they would be the scapegoats and bear all the condemnation. Nevertheless, is it true that human beings are capable of determining every aspect of their life? People are born into families, growing up in a nation which is not chosed by them, and educated with curriculum offered by educational institutions. Although they seem free, this freedom is deceptive.

In every aspect of life, individuals have only limited amount of choices, even though media and government acclaim that people have enough freedom and are under no constrains. Under the disguise that the society welcomes all sorts of occupation and talents, people with unique wisdom always find themselves in conflict with the majority. They have no choice but to give up their uniqueness, otherwise they would not fit in. For example, the famous philosopher Socrates tried to save Athens from its corruption by provoking young people to re-examine their beliefs. Socrates was the only person who realized that despite being a democratic society, Athens was in the danger of downfall, due to the ubiquity of sophistry. However, his insight and warning did not change people's mind, but rather led to his own execution. Socrates felt that he had no choice but to accept the death sentence, because to live would be to sin, just as other people. Political authorities often times determine the standard for a good citizen, and anyone who confronts such standards would be eliminated.

In some other examples, individuals who follow authorities still get condemned, because no one has the courage to accuse the regime itself. When the disater of Chernobyl happened, the staff who worked during that midnight shift got put into prison for 20 years. The Soviet Union avoided prosecuting any government officals who led the construction of the nuclear power plant, nor political leaders who tried to ignore the incident after its occurence. All the condemnation went to those individuals. They were of course not innocent, but they were accused of crimes that went beyond their reponsibilities.

One might argue that a person just needs to be careful in order to avoid wrongdoings, since in most cases one would not kill a person by accident, or steal something unless actually intent to steal. A person commits crime because he wants something that he cannot gain through legal means. However, this claim is only valid on the condition that the law itself is just, and the society is just.

A person who is financilly broke and jobless may be a diligent worker, and his financial situation occurs because of a nation's financial crisis. A woman who becomes a prostitute may actually be a victim of human trafficking. Both the individual and the society must take responsibility of any citizen's situation, because everybody is a social animal, and the society is superior than any individual.

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Average: 7.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 119, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...s financial situation occurs because of a nations financial crisis. A woman who becomes a...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 295, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'citizens'' or 'citizen's'?
Suggestion: citizens'; citizen's
...society must take responsibility of any citizens situation, because everybody is a socia...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 381, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[1]
Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
...ial animal, and the society is superior than any individual.
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, then, for example, of course, in most cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.3162921348 194% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2510.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 487.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15400410678 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79404329575 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 215.323595506 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574948665298 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 790.2 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6408042285 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.130434783 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1739130435 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.39130434783 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 5.13820224719 272% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107009035183 0.243740707755 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0295157875895 0.0831039109588 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0296415264705 0.0758088955206 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0583304848553 0.150359130593 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339365094705 0.0667264976115 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 100.480337079 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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