Critical judgment of work in any given field has little value unless it comes from someone who is an expert in that field.
When it comes to critical judgment of work, as far as I am concerned ,I don’t think only the advice someone who is an expert in that field is worthwhile taking. The opinion from the public or the society is important as well.
Some might argue that only expert can involve in the discussion of the specific field. For example, designing new technological products need enough background knowledge to understand the work of machine so that the improvement or creation can be carried out. Surely, it seems too true to refute. However, what they neglect is that only the involvement from the expert is far way from being called “the success of a product”. The advice from the public can help the expert to perceive some aspect that they cannot know or they aren’t aware of. We continues the last example. Although the public doesn’t know the knowledge behind how the machine works, they can tell the designer about what kinds of the product they will prefer to buy. That is much more important than anything in order to make the product successful.
In addition, the involvement from the public can prevent the bias from the expert so that the work won’t lose its liability. For example, the establishment of the jury is try to prevent the judge from sentencing criminal unfairly. It is likely that the judge may not be fair once the criminal is his or her relative. Hence the functionality of jury can maintain the justice of the society and the fairness of the world.
From my point of view, though the idea from the expert is important, the public and the society also plays a important part in the success of the work because the work that the producer invents or carries out must be related to the public. Hence, it is reasonable that the opinion from the society surely counts.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ce the criminal is his or her relative. Hence the functionality of jury can maintain ...
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...opinion from the society surely counts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, may, so, well, while, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 2235.4752809 67% => OK
No of words: 315.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73333333333 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49205338184 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514285714286 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 704.065955056 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.5664757712 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1875 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6875 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21995427794 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0674732529287 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.093754092549 0.0758088955206 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164772244182 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116600142687 0.0667264976115 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.8420337079 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.1743820225 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 100.480337079 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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