Throughout the world, education has never ceased to draw public attention and provoke debates. Although many people believe educational institutions play a vital role in students’ future careers, the issue as to whether those institutions are responsible to prevent students from following majors in which they are not likely to perform well remains controversial. To the best of my knowledge, educational academies and especially teachers should motivate students to discover their potentials and pursue what they do best.
Oprah Winfrey has been ranked the greatest black philanthropist in American history with the synonymous The Oprah Winfrey Show. From her humble beginnings in rural Mississippi, Oprah Winfrey has established herself as one of the most important figures in popular culture. One of the defining moments of her life came in fourth grade when she was a student of the teacher who positively influenced her, Mrs. Duncan. She helped Oprah Winfrey to not be afraid of being smart, encouraged her to read, gave her advice to choose books and let Oprah assist her grade papers; this led to the goal of Oprah was becoming a fourth grade teacher. Eventually, Oprah Winfrey is not only a talk show host but also an influencer, it all started from an inspiring teacher.
Bill Gates is best known as co-founder of Microsoft Corporation and a philanthropist. The chairman of Microsoft Corp had a huge influence from “a very kindly librarian and teacher” Blanche Caffiere. She played an important role in Bill Gates’ life, stirred up passion for learning in him when he was a shy boy and did not like to go to school. Ms. Caffiere took him under her wings and helped make it okay for him to be a messy, nerdy boy who was reading many books; she shared her love of books with Bill Gates and then assisted him to choose books. The time with Ms. Caffiere sparked his interest in libraries and his focus on helping children in America get the benefits of the great teacher.
Steve Jobs is another famous person who was a co-founder of Apple and revolutionized technology. As a child, Jobs was apparently indifferent to school for long periods until he met his fourth grade teacher, Imogene Teddy Hill. She helped him developed focus towards learning by bribing him with candy and it did not take long for Jobs to get interested in learning after that. In the following years, Steve Jobs got increasingly curious about the world of electronics and from there started his journey building Apple.
In conclusion, it is true that educational institutions impact on students’ careers but they should encourage them to follow their potential and passion. The living examples of Oprah Winfrey, Bill Gates and Steve Jobs bear this out. The positive influence of their teachers stand them in good stead.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 212, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...tudents' future careers, the issue as to whether those institutions are responsible to p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, if, so, then, well, as to, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2370.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 468.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0641025641 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79334232439 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557692307692 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 719.1 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3904949344 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.5 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0992617992162 0.243740707755 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0298509917822 0.0831039109588 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0486800990727 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0660813654558 0.150359130593 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709304033044 0.0667264976115 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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