Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Educational institution pursuing students to choose a career that will give them a lot of financial or any other advantage is what we often see in some institutions today. While there is a benefit to such encouragement for better life of student, there are many drawbacks to it. I disagree with the prompt for three reasons.
If educational institutes persuade students into seeking jobs that will give them lucrative career in the future, the competition in the field will be skyrocketed. On the face it might seem to have no problem, but it affects the students who are truly passionate for the field. Say for example, career in AI, if a lot of students are persuaded into going for career in AI, they might end up doing a job that pays good but won’t innovate anything, as majority will be seeking it for benefits. The students who are truly passionate will bring innovation in to the field, but due to competition many of them won’t make it in.
Also, it’s an unsaid rule that in order for this world to function properly, a lot of different career quota needs to be fulfilled. Example, a recent surge in Data Science has led all of the students to go for it, but there is a need for COBOL language programmers which is not fulfilled, many operations of certain organization depend on it. Whenever a worker resigns from COBOL programmer job, it stagnates the progress in that field until a new programmer is found to replace. If educational institution promote every field equally based on passion of students, COBOL programmers won’t be hard to find because there has to be someone who could be passionate of the language.
Another study proved that students who choose a field of study that they love tend to be happier than those who choose field just for higher salaries. The dopamine is the hormone in the brain released when you do something you love. This hormone thus is partly responsible for job satisfaction. Job satisfaction is directly associated with suicide rates. For example, in Japan, the suicide rates have skyrocketed since the tech boom, many people pursued careers in tech despite no passion for it, leading stressful life and ending up with a suicide.
Educational institutions must lead students to pursue their passion, avail them of necessary guidance to seek for field of study that support their passion and educate them about possible jobs in respective interest. In the end, the lucrative careers won’t make you “successful”, real success is happiness sought through passion for your field of interest.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 181, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... a recent surge in Data Science has led all of the students to go for it, but there is a n...
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Line 7, column 120, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to field'
Suggestion: to field
...end to be happier than those who choose field just for higher salaries. The dopamine ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, thus, while, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2131.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 432.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93287037037 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76482221818 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516203703704 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5570827353 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.388888889 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.77777777778 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317545517957 0.243740707755 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103473694019 0.0831039109588 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542227937667 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189583775515 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049407664596 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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