Educational institutions should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and su

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Educational institutions should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.

people believe it is one of the education system’s duty to guide students in choosing the academic field and make them aware of some fields which do not have a good chance of being improved. On the other hand, other part of people holds this opinion that education system should respect the choice of students and lets them to choose their future by their own. I strongly agree with the second group and will discuss on my opinion in the following.

first and foremost, if students are interested enough in a field of education, they will find a way to succeed in it, even if the chance of becoming successful in that particular major is minuscule. it is clear to all that each time a person be eliminated by a system for following special rules and doing as he is asked to, he cannot achieve any especial success in it. In contrast, having the sense of freedom can help individuals to think broadly and find solution for their problems that are in their favorite field. this point can be extended to education system. if students be asked to study in a specific field of major, just because the chance of becoming successful in that field is more compared to some others, they cannot have this sense of freedom and will not eagerly look for solutions. On the other hand, education systems by allowing students to enter major which may not have a good chance of success at the first glance, have let them to work in that field and even make it a successful field of study. As an example, in my country Iran, some academic majors like computer science have so many graduate students from top universities who do not have stable jobs yet. As a result, the education system of my country inhibited new high school student from enter this field of study. just some years later, the country realized how their knowledge and progress in the field of computer science and it has degraded, decided to let students enter this academic major.

second, the world and its conditions are changing rapidly which unable education systems to predict the chance of having success in each academic field. None of education systems can ensure the chance of success of failure in a specific major and it is all due to the point that the world is going forward rapidly and a successful job or academic major may not stay like this in the future. this point makes it clear why education systems can not decide about the future of the student and it is better to let them to choose their academic field based on their own interest. For instance, a decade ago, the Artificial Intelligence was not a major which most of the education systems suggest it. due to the lack of their knowledge about the changes which may happen in the future, they could not have any guess about the chance of success of failure in this field. if any of the education systems had a plan for inhibiting from choosing this academic field, they would regret currently, because this major which was not even one of the famous majors some decades ago, currently is one of the tops which has a good chance for making its graduates students successful.

However, if an education system uses its experience and show the students the path of each major, it can be a good help for them. some students are not mature enough to choose their academic major which can chance their life forever. if the education system gives them some guideline, these students may have more chances of becoming successful in the future. but, this guideline should be just for informing them and not forcing them to choose a specific major.

To sum up, it is clear that one of the main roles of each education system is to make the students aware of their future career if they choose any academic field, but insisting in choosing some especial majors and eliminating others is not a thing a good education system should do. By letting student to choose their academic major as they wish, they find a chance of finding solutions for fields which currently have lots of problems. Moreover, it is predictable if a specific major will have a good chance of success in the future as well as the past or not. based on these justification, I believe it is not a good idea to force student to choose a particular major.

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but, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, well, for instance, in contrast, as a result, as well as, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 33.0505617978 218% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 102.0 58.6224719101 174% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3513.0 2235.4752809 157% => OK
No of words: 756.0 442.535393258 171% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64682539683 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.24361079503 4.55969084622 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41269369894 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.351851851852 0.4932671777 71% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1116.0 704.065955056 159% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.10617977528 290% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.2893846842 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.115384615 118.986275619 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0769230769 23.4991977007 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53846153846 5.21951772744 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 7.80617977528 231% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159338327406 0.243740707755 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065203532469 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381152006797 0.0758088955206 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117381387988 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.01643914013 0.0667264976115 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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