The effectiveness of a country’s leaders is best measured by examining the
well-being of that country’s citizens.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
In the history of the world, there are numerous examples of countries’ leaders with different characteristics. The fact is that the destiny of the countries and their people depends on their leaders. Thus, in the countries where leader improved the well-being of his country’s people, he is considered a “Father of the Nation” and its hero, while, in the countries whose leader followed just his own ambitions which are, not always, really valuable and positive, the destiny of the country and its people became a tragedy. In my opinion, I strongly agree that the welfare of the people of one country should be measured by the effectiveness of its leader.
To begin, there are many leaders in the history of the world who fought for better lives of their people. These leaders often used cooperation instead of competitiveness which approved their effectiveness and resulted with a victory. For instance, Gandhi who was a leader of Indians, firstly in South Africa and later in India, by his approach of non-violent civil disobedience, won against the British rule. His leadership model was followed in the whole world. For example, Nelson Mandela, the first black democratically elected President of South Africa, using non-violent civil disobedience model, ended the apartheid in 1994. Helped by the previous President de Klerk, Mandela won against race discrimination in South Africa for which both, Mandela and de Klerk, won Nobel Prize for The Peace in the World. The third example of non-violent disobedience is Martin Luther King. He fought against discrimination of the African Americans in the United States. Martin Luther King was the youngest leader in the world to be awarded Nobel Prize for the Piece in the World. The effectiveness of these leaders is obvious. They dedicated their lives for the freedom of their people which is the first human right without which human progress is impossible.
Further, in the conditions of peace, many aspects of the well-being of the people still depend on many conditions like physical well-being, public safety, social and economic equality, education, science, arts and cultural heritage. Countries considered the best regarding the well-being of their people nowadays, are certainly countries where the effectiveness of the leaders is measured by instilling all these conditions of people’s welfare. For instance, Nordic countries are considered the best for the well-being of their people. Their success is in establishing in so-called ‘Nordic Model’ which implies social and economic policies followed by all Nordic countries Finland, Sweden, Denmark, Norway and Iceland. This model ensures that the countries where it is implemented are safe and stable. Since there is no corruption, Nordic citizens have trust in the countries’ politics and police who are pivotal for the welfare of their citizens. Another great example of a country with good well-being of its citizens is Canada. Their Prime Minister, Stephen Harper, employed economic policies and propagated healthy business in the time of recession which saved Canadians from feeling impacts of the recession. Other similar examples were much earlier employed by President Roosevelt in the time of ‘Great Depression’ when he introduced “The New Deal” programs and projects which developed American economy.
In conclusion, the greatness and well-being of one nation can be seen in the quality of its leader. If the leader is negative, as it was Hitler, then his ambitions result in the tragedy for his country and the whole world. In contrast, examples as Lincoln and his Emancipation Proclamation can only significantly improve the citizens’ welfare.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 313, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...country's people, he is considered a 'Father of the Nation' and it...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, really, regarding, so, still, then, third, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.5258426966 174% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3159.0 2235.4752809 141% => OK
No of words: 579.0 442.535393258 131% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45595854922 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90534594407 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03422429999 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469775474957 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 969.3 704.065955056 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.599397811 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4444444444 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 5.21951772744 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317024570002 0.243740707755 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0932529080749 0.0831039109588 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689122455122 0.0758088955206 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20682815624 0.150359130593 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0859998174174 0.0667264976115 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.04 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 160.0 100.480337079 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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