The effectiveness of a country s leaders is best measured by examining the well being of that country s citizens Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position

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The effectiveness of a country's leaders is best measured by examining the well being of that country's citizens.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

There is a disputation whether the well-being of a country is the best ruler to measure the effectiveness of the country's leaders. I think the question heavily depends on the meaning of "effectiveness": what does it mean of effectiveness of leaders? I think this means leaders' ability on governing their countries. Thus I will focus on the status of the country mainly, and I will evaluate leaders be reflecting this status. I will present two types of countries, one pursues strong country but seems not care their citizen's well-being, and the other want to catch well-being but not effectively. Therefore, maintaining well-being of their citizen is not a best way to measure the effectiveness of leaders.
Firstly, there are leaders who pursues "strong country"; there are various aspects of strongness: the most simplest one is getting strong military and force, and less simplest one is culminating their own culture. For example, various presidents of the United States during Cold War develops their scientific techniques and cultural influences, but surprisingly, none of them developed systems for social welfare: although many citizens enjoys financial developments, some poor citizens were not.
There might be an objection: getting a strong military and well-developed culture is related to earning money, and it also related to the well-being of citizens. However, both relations are not exactly hold: consider Nazi Germany as an example. Adolf Hitler depicted a vigorous Germanic country, so he trained military and eventually led to a war to enlarge their territory. Does it improves German's well-being? No, lots of their citizens were exploited by the war and suppressed by the Nazi government.
Secondly, we know that various countries which pursue the well-being of their people, like Scandinavian and West European countries. Various communist countries, like Cuba, is also an example. Let me focus on communist countries: their motto is (in most cases, "was") to provide welfare services for their people. Unfortunately, their object is ill-performed: their system hampers productivity of factories and farms, and It harms their economy and affects their culture in bad ways. Even though people of the country are happy for free health cares and education, their country seems not under effective rule.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...s ability on governing their countries. Thus I will focus on the status of the count...
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Line 1, column 667, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...ning well-being of their citizen is not a best way to measure the effectiveness o...
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Line 2, column 114, Rule ID: MOST_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'simplest' (without 'most') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: simplest
... are various aspects of strongness: the most simplest one is getting strong military and forc...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'most the simplest'.
Suggestion: most the simplest
... are various aspects of strongness: the most simplest one is getting strong military and forc...
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Line 2, column 174, Rule ID: LESS_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Non-standard use of the comparative or superlative. Did you mean 'less simple'?
Suggestion: less simple
... getting strong military and force, and less simplest one is culminating their own culture. F...
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Line 3, column 384, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'improve'?
Suggestion: improve
...war to enlarge their territory. Does it improves Germans well-being? No, lots of their c...
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Message: Did you mean 'improve'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: improve
...war to enlarge their territory. Does it improves Germans well-being? No, lots of their c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, i think, in most cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1990.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 363.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48209366391 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21254409419 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561983471074 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1927917844 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.555555556 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.21951772744 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205766313408 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792789721794 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765853332219 0.0758088955206 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125338355221 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0730715026776 0.0667264976115 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.38706741573 115% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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