The fact that technology is outpacing the needs of those in cultures that can afford the technology creates cultures of excessive consumerism.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and

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The fact that technology is outpacing the needs of those in cultures that can afford the technology creates cultures of excessive consumerism.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Today’s era of twentifirst century is witnessing unprecedented and superfast technological advancement. The growth of technology is outpacing our needs. While this has definitely led to a better and more comfortable lifestyle, but blaming technological growth to culture of excess consumerism would be fallacious. The primary reasons to corroborate this fact is the gamut of range that technology provides in all economic range and that mere correlation of technological advancement and growing consumerism is not enough to accuse the former to be the cause of the later.

Firstly, we must remind ourselves of the wide exhaustive range of products the technology todaqy offers. At no other time in the history was such a wide range available at our dispensation. For example, the cell phones that we use have such a wide economic range that a labour in India or Africa is also able to buy and use a cell phone in his meagre income. The more the technology advances, lower are the prices. So, linking the excessive consumerism to technology seems spurious and moreover, rationally invalid.

Secondly, there can be other factors that might have grown along with the growing technology that can be plausible reasons fo rthe growing consumerism. For example, people these days want to look privileged even if they are actually not. Although this phenomenon is existing since ages, it has grown humongously these days. Technology does make the practising of this “wanna look cool” phenomenon more viable with the excessive exorbitant facilities it provides, but this phenomenon could be carried out with other things like jwellery, precious stones, spacious houses or any such thing. Therefore, it is unjustified to ignore all the potential ccauses of rising consumerism and blaming technology for the same.

However, the author might argue that growing technology has enculcated things like internet etc in the list basic requirement of human beings in today’s world. This has led to increase in monetary requirements needed to live a decent life. While I agree that technology has led exorbitant cost of decent living, but the power of choice still lies in the hands of the money owner. He is entitled to spend judiciously and only according to his or her capacity.

Summing up, we can not accuse technological oupacing for the growing culture of excessive consumerism. While the technology has led to higher cost of living, the choice of spending lies solely with the money holder. There can ve various other reasons like moral or psychological responsible for the burgeoning consumerism today.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'well', 'while', 'for example']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.236170212766 0.240241500013 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.153191489362 0.157235817809 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.123404255319 0.0880659088768 140% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0468085106383 0.0497285424764 94% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0297872340426 0.0444667217837 67% => OK
Prepositions: 0.110638297872 0.12292977631 90% => OK
Participles: 0.0531914893617 0.0406280797675 131% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.99061055198 2.79330140395 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0297872340426 0.030933414821 96% => OK
Particles: 0.00425531914894 0.0016655270985 255% => OK
Determiners: 0.0978723404255 0.0997080785238 98% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0191489361702 0.0249443105267 77% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00425531914894 0.0148568991511 29% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2625.0 2732.02544248 96% => OK
No of words: 417.0 452.878318584 92% => OK
Chars per words: 6.29496402878 6.0361032391 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.58838876751 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.381294964029 0.366273622748 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.294964028777 0.280924506359 105% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.227817745803 0.200843997647 113% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.177458033573 0.132149295362 134% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99061055198 2.79330140395 107% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 219.290929204 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520383693046 0.48968727796 106% => OK
Word variations: 58.6886137815 55.4138127331 106% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6194690265 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.8571428571 23.380412469 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.649817423 59.4972553346 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.0 141.124799967 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 23.380412469 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.809523809524 0.674092028746 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 49.3535457348 51.4728631049 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.74074074074 1.64882698954 106% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.53761376869 0.391690518653 137% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0945189953236 0.123202303941 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0629295079035 0.077325440228 81% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.503764693131 0.547984918172 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.126583282664 0.149214159877 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.202730540126 0.161403998019 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12250881829 0.0892212321368 137% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.32916515798 0.385218514788 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0577993755306 0.0692045440612 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.372362689806 0.275328986314 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550117215456 0.0653680567796 84% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.4325221239 105% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 3.66592920354 164% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.5995575221 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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