Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Formal education has a long history even since 1000 years ago according to research reporting there were academies to convey experts’ knowledge and opinions. However, how perceiving formal education is quite different depending on educationists. Although some insist that formal education restricts having free minds and spirits, the opposite view seems more persuasive.
Firstly, sometimes creativity comes from what is formal. There is a stereotype that is in common thought as having free sprits: inventors. Some people argue that inventors are those who barely affected by the subjects many people normally learned in school as formal education as they sometimes bring somewhat totally new, never seen before. However, it is not true: the basic thoughts and ideas are almost coming from scientific concepts acquired from formal education. In shorts, formal education partially devoted to inventors’ creativity. Hence, it shows the argument that formal education is detrimental to free spirits cannot hold water.
Secondly, freedom is allowed when it is acceptable in general. There is a myth that free minds and spirits mean doing whatever he or she wants without considering how the result will be good or bad. However, it is wrong: if so-called free minds and spirits are related to somewhat not allowed such as using weeds, stealing, or killing someone, it is not a free spirit but just a crime. In order to have minds and spirits which can be accepted as free, one needs to certain the boundary they should not be over, and it can be acquired from formal education. Thus, formal education actually helps someone to have free minds and spirits in a salubrious boundary.
On the other hand, it has been reported that some students with formal education showed that they have difficulties in conducting somewhat creative activities. However, it seems not simply due to formal education but due to exclusion of contents such as how to think creatively, how to get rid of thinking barriers, and how to build previous ideas more original.
To sum up, although some might see the reported restrained thoughts from students who have received formal education indicate its restriction to free minds¸ it does not simply due to the problem innate to the way of education. Furthermore, there is significant evidence that formal education is actually related to free minds and spirits. Therefore, the given prompt cannot be agreed upon.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, as for, in general, in short, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2055.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 392.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24234693878 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68986322537 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533163265306 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3846840656 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.157894737 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6315789474 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94736842105 5.21951772744 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173712861056 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612526356628 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354223579307 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103141801359 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305372630096 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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