Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free

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Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.

Does the formal education tend to restrain our mind and spirit rather than set them free? The writer contends so. I mostly agree with the author's contention because of the following reasons.

First of all, retrospective to the past, more than three hundred years ago, there were no formal education. Children of that periods used to wander freely in the nature and they were relatively much more happy than those of the children in twenty-first century. In the present context of the world, when a child is just two or three, parents send them to the educational intitutions, they rarely get time to play and grow up with nature. In this term, this formal education has restrained our minds and spirits rather than setting them free.

Second of all, today the educational intitutions are ubiquitous. Due to the prevalent intitutions, large number of people are able to take the formal educaton, however, this education has taken several years of human life time, causing people's limited outlook outside the formal education. People are not aware with the nature in a natural way, they simply study about nature in the books. However, just bookish education cannot provide the quality education. Due to the rife coursebook, people rarely have time to think freely. They have to focus in a particular area, which is important in job asepect, so it is causing to restraining the human minds and spirits.

Third of all, if a student choose the subject in which he or she has interest in, it might not hold water in such case. For supporting example, when a student choose any field according to his or her interest, it doesn't simply restrain his or her mind, but set them free. Nonetheless, choosing the interested area is mostly possible in college only. In lower school, whether they like or not, they must study the formal educational material, hence it might be the burdeon to the students. Consequently, it restrains our mind and spirit.

In sum, I mostly agree with the writer's claim that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free, however, it might not be the case as a whole.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, look, nonetheless, second, so, third, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1770.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 363.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87603305785 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52303400335 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534435261708 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.8823546706 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1578947368 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1052631579 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05263157895 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.517977343294 0.243740707755 213% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172396221586 0.0831039109588 207% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.26163930139 0.0758088955206 345% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.371170800903 0.150359130593 247% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.193627259966 0.0667264976115 290% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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