Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and s

There is no shortage of opinions regarding if formal education limits our ability to thinking or set it free, what makes this issue a contentious one. While each opinion has its strengths and weaknesses, I strongly believe that formal education is essential to empower us to analyse and propose solutions to several of daily problems we face in our lives, thus freeing our minds and spirits.

First of all, there is no doubt that formal education provide by schools and universities gives us many important tools to tackle most of the hardest issues that challenges our society. For example, without an outstanding ground in mathematics and physics it would be impossible to have so wonder buildings we have today. Indeed, the knowledge of calculus is a fundamental tool to make designers able to to project unbelievable building shapes like those we can see in Dubai and other modern cities. Thus, the deep understaning of some matters undoubtfuly can open new possibilities and freeing our minds to develop new things.

The second reason supporting my position is that formal education broaden our knowledge towards complimentary matters, helping us to think in a wider perspective about any problem. For example, in Brazil all formal education of engineering include in their curriculum some courses of economics. This obly future engineers to expand their minds to approach complex demands of the society by providing not just feaseble but also cost-effective solutions. Moreover, the contact with new subjects provide in formal education make people free to decide what enphasys one should have in your career. This worker with me, for ecample. As a telecommunications engineer that have had contact with economics in the college, I decided to focus my carrer on telecommunications economics.

On the other hand, one may argue that formal education is used to have a very restrict curriculum that doesn't give room for creative and diversity in preapration of new professionals. Nevertheless, this point is really flawed because most of the curriculum of formal undergraduate and graduate degrees requires engagement in a number of "free choice" courses. With this flexibility, formal education assure students a broaden knowledge. For example, in my formal education as enginner, I had the oportuniy to complete a course of Brazilian official sign language, what helps me today to comunicate with clients with limitations to speak and hear.

To sum up, based on the aforementioned reasons, I definitely holds the opinion that formal education more frees our minds and spirits to think out of the box than limits or restricts us anyhow.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, really, regarding, second, so, thus, while, for example, no doubt, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2241.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 424.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28537735849 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04911786407 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582547169811 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 712.8 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3051144605 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.823529412 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9411764706 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41176470588 5.21951772744 180% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191958863121 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658028716641 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374089207529 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115167239443 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0238744563438 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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