Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoni

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Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

Government if of the people, by the people, for the people are famous worlds quoted by Abhram Lincoln. This saying is very accurate and descriptive of the topic at hand, government official are elected by the people and respresent them in the democracy by putting forward the idealogies of the people in front of the senate. I agree with the prompt that officials should use their own finejudgement when needed rather carrying out the will of the people, for the following reasons.

Elected officials reprsent the whole area, city or count in an discussion, they are elected by not majority and not the abosulte population. If they were to carry out what the people who elected them told to, they would bring harm to the ones who didn't wish to see them in power due to difference in ideals. If in this case the representative was to act on his own accord while keeping in the mind the rights and intrest of the minority then he would come out as a better leader and person in perspective of the aggregate he was representing. He is likely to them be again elected as he has now gained favour of the minority. If he would have gone by the saying of the people he has been elected by, he would harm the intrests if the minorities and weake sections, creating a rift in the population leading to chaos and unrest in the different sects of the society.

The goal of the repsentative is to fulfill the will of the people he is reprseting while taking into consideration the rights of the weaker sections. He can use any fair means to fullfill his mandate to make the people happy and keep his word. He doesn't necessarily need to listen to what people tell him to do, sometimes people may force him into unethical ways and guresome situations which can tarnish his own self esteem. For instance, people of a country may force its elceted leader to stringent immigration and refugee laws to prevent illegal residents from entering the county and consuming the resources. In this case people may want the leader to deport these people of asylum, doing so will defame the leader in the world's view. He can simply shift them to an area of lower population or area where the resources are in abundance. Doing so will be a win-win situation for both the people and the leader.

So a leader and it's people can ensure a smooth functioning of the country by supporting each other, in these ways the voice of the people gets a say and the situations are managed smoothly by the fine judgement of the leader, without creating any unrest. So it is better if the leader can listen to the people but take the final decision on his own accord.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 61, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...prsent the whole area, city or count in an discussion, they are elected by not maj...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
..., they would bring harm to the ones who didnt wish to see them in power due to differ...
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Line 3, column 633, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had gone'?
Suggestion: had gone
...ow gained favour of the minority. If he would have gone by the saying of the people he has been...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... the people happy and keep his word. He doesnt necessarily need to listen to what peop...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, then, while, as to, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2158.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 474.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55274261603 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51834763485 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481012658228 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 681.3 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9208763036 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.941176471 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8823529412 23.4991977007 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.94117647059 5.21951772744 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14930504527 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0540096188195 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543662172286 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100416400812 0.150359130593 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604960296223 0.0667264976115 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 48.8420337079 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 12.1639044944 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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