Governments officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reason

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Governments officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

Do the government officials should rely on their own judgement rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve? The author contends so. I believe that government is a servant of its citizens, however, I strongly agree with the author's contention that the The government should rely on their own judgment while fulfilling the people's demand it serves because of the following two reasons.

To begin, the main task of the government is to make the society a better place, a good government should always be inclusive. Society contains various type of people with different religious prospectus, different financial condition, different spoken language and different color. When the government fulfills the demand of a particular group without it's own judgment, it may seriously harm other's fundamental rights. For instance, In Nepal, some Muslim group were demanding that they should be allowed to pray and play a big sound speaker in a public place, Nepali government haphazardly allowed them. Consequently, other people in the society irritated with the chaos made by Muslim people in the public place. It appropriated fundamental right of other common people, eventually government realized that and it cancelled it's decision. So,this example illustrates that, government should use their own judgment while fulfilling any people's will.

Further, society contains different type of people, if one demands that they should be allowed to marry more than one at the same time and if government fulfills such demands unquestioningly, it creates a great ethical question. For instance, in Nepal, some particular group were demanding that they should be allowed to have more than one wives at the same time. What happens if the government fulfills such specious will of the people? Certainly, it will rise a serious question about the task of the government. Hence, the government should use their own cerebral capacity while fulfilling the demands of the people they serve.

However, some people may argue that the task of the government is to fulfill the demand of the people, serve the people. I agree that the task of the government is to serve people, serve the people of all group, not only a particular group . So they should be inclusive, in order to be inclusive, they should make decisions that won't harm any other group's fundamental rights.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, hence, however, if, may, so, while, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2003.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 382.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24345549738 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78526815783 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447643979058 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 602.1 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9849893185 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.277777778 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2222222222 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44444444444 5.21951772744 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26413973549 0.243740707755 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104601406491 0.0831039109588 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103348648339 0.0758088955206 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203826073022 0.150359130593 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105981789572 0.0667264976115 159% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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