Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Government of a country should take care of the development of every aspect of its people, from their safety to their artistic side. In the ancient era, almost every ruler gave equal emphasis on the development of their culture, arts, literature and music. Even today we remember all these eminent ruler's for their contribution in this field, for example, in India Great Ashoka, Dyanstry of Maurya's and finally Mughals. Even today we remember all these rulers because of their contibution in the enrichment of society in terms of art and culture. Hence, I strongly support the argument that government should shift their focus towards the development of society by supporting different organization so dedicated for these causes. To bolster my opinion, I woud like to present the few points in this regard.
At first, authorities should evaluate their contribution in terms of amount spent, accolding the eminent personalities in their respective fields of art , for instance, in literature, dancing, painting, music and few others. people in authority need to give time towards this crucial and inevitable part of our development. For example, the inclusion of art subjects at elementary level should be encouraged, students leaning towards making their contribution in these fields should be encouraged by awarding them different types of fellowships. Also, new academic institutions should be opened in the area so that candidates should not leave their place to pursue higher education.
Secondly, even today when people are more lean toward technology and its development, none of the eminent researchers could deny the fact that art that these two fields are interwoven. Many historical developments in science and technology are on the foundation of simple concept of art. So, these two should not be separated. Educational institutes should provide opportunities to learn both fields equally to students. Also, authorities should provide ample research grants in the fields of arts also. That is. in the annual budget of a government, where there is a separate part od money for science and research similarly, a part of arts should also be there. This major step will enhance the curiosity and interest of students in the desired field. At last, main goal of most of the scholars are to earn money and live a comfortable life, but there is a misconception that in art field, future os a candidate is not that much bright as it is in science.
Thirdly, new vacancies with good pay scale should be announced by the government to make this an interesting field. All these steps start at the rudimentary level, where a school student should be encouraged. As most of the part of our society is driven by the field of art only.
Albeit, investment in the maintenance and development of armed forces is inevitable, because it is also the responsibility of the government to keep their people safe, and for this military is essential. All three forces Army, Navy and Airforce plays a vital role in protection of country. But on the other hand, it is also important that people prove themselves in the world with their remarkable contribution for the benefit of humanity.
In conclusion, art is the embellishment of a culture whereas, its military is its beckbone. In present scenario, where every country is well equipped with nuclear weapons, only art and oiterature is the field which could connect people in different parts of the world on intellectual basis. Consequently, government of any country should dedicate themselves for the development of this part of society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...e research grants in the fields of arts also. That is. in the annual budget of a gov...
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... a school student should be encouraged. As most of the part of our society is driv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, hence, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, third, thirdly, well, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 58.6224719101 150% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 12.9106741573 256% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3030.0 2235.4752809 136% => OK
No of words: 583.0 442.535393258 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19725557461 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91379618374 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90255030509 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 215.323595506 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492281303602 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 941.4 704.065955056 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2246837384 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.222222222 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5925925926 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.48148148148 5.21951772744 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190010348414 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553077459917 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399298701863 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107269413143 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337793387652 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 100.480337079 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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