If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it are justifiable.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting yo

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If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it are justifiable.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Cameron Hanes, a famous youtuber that tries to be a role model to men and women, has a very powerful quote, “Nobody cares, work harder.” This is an extremely valuable lesson, because life is going to hit you hard and will try to keep you laying down with no strength to get up, but as Rocky Balboa would say: “It’s bot about how many time you fall, but how many time to get up and fight and try again.” However, you should always respect the law and be ethical in all you attitudes. The prompt states that everything is valid when you pursue a goal. In my opinion, I mostly disagree with the opinion expressed in the passage and the reasons are as follows.

First of all, if you pride yourself in being a honest individual, then you should know that even if you steal a pencil from someone else -- something that might seam ‘benign’ – is illegal. This means that integrity is something wholesome, either you are or not. For instance, Brazil has two different types of Universities: private universities and government funded universities. Private Universities have been suffering with a high ratio of corruption, especially in medicine related majors. Very rich parents have been paying a student position in some private universities, sometimes bribing professors and people from the assessment committee with thousands, even millions of reais (Brazilian currency). Last year, several students lost their positions at the universities, and even worst, some have lost their diplomas and were sentenced to jail. This comes to show that lying and deceiving has a full circle, you may think that everything is ok and no one will catch you but once the cycle closes, people will know who you really are.

Secondly, people that don’t obey the rules of conduct, whether in life or sports, will certainly lose their prestige once the sand castle falls. This is what happens when professional athletes cheat in their preparations, using performance enhancing drugs to circumvent the rules of the competition. An example of such would be positive tested UFC fighters that were banned from the octagon for using illegal drugs. In parallel, many high school students in Brazil are caught red handed while performing the standardized test called ENEM – an exam similar to the SAT in the US. It clearly states in the exam’s rule book that all type of cognitive enhancing drugs are forbidden and can result in banning the student for a period of two years, where he is forbidden to retake the exam.

Of course, if you are within the law, then people should definitely try everything possible in order to reach their final goal. There is nothing worst than regretting the things that you could have done in order to increase the chances of success. For instance, Cafu – a widely know football player from Brazil – was rejected eighteen times before he joined a football club that believed in his work. It is said that he would leave his house and run almost 10 kilometers a day from his city to the city where he played, in order to practice. Eventually, he became well known for his extraordinary athleticism during games, which eventually led him to play in Italy. His was the captain of the Brazilian team in 2002, when they won their fifth world title. In his interviews, he would always that if he hadn’t been so persistent, that maybe he would have become a regular Joe, working at a store or something similar.

In conclusion, people should have goals and they should strive in obtaining them, but only if your actions don’t affect the well-being of the ones around you. You may think that its just a small lie, a harmless attitude. But, small or big, a lie is, and will always be, a lie.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 350, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'many times'.
Suggestion: many times
...ould say: 'It's bot about how many time you fall, but how many time to get up a...
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Line 1, column 378, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'many times'.
Suggestion: many times
...t about how many time you fall, but how many time to get up and fight and try again.&apos...
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Line 3, column 46, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... of all, if you pride yourself in being a honest individual, then you should know...
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Line 5, column 492, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...students in Brazil are caught red handed while performing the standardized test c...
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Line 7, column 146, Rule ID: WORST_THAN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'worse'?
Suggestion: worse
...each their final goal. There is nothing worst than regretting the things that you cou...
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Line 9, column 144, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding ones'?
Suggestion: the surrounding ones
...ons don't affect the well-being of the ones around you. You may think that its just a small li...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, of course, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.3162921348 203% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 69.0 33.0505617978 209% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3112.0 2235.4752809 139% => OK
No of words: 640.0 442.535393258 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8625 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02973371873 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69274272605 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 357.0 215.323595506 166% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5578125 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 949.5 704.065955056 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.142741323 60.3974514979 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.48 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84 5.21951772744 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203098106118 0.243740707755 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555618561342 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053939110583 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109681644395 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596196818099 0.0667264976115 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 100.480337079 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 11.8971910112 244% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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