It is more harmful to compromise one's own beliefs than to adhere to them.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Compromise is an art of life. Such is some people’s suggestion. Since no one could always get their ways, they said, without the acknowledgement of the necessity of compromise once in a while, one could become very frustrated, frequently bearing a feeling of defeat. This group of voice goes on to suggest that it is the very myth that insistence on one’s belief is invaluable that leads to incredible high rates of depression in modern society, for people who are ignorant about the importance of compromises are harmed by adhering to inflexible approaches of beliefs. This author, however, could not agree with such line of thinking and would rather insist that it is surely healthier for every individual to adhere to their beliefs to the end. Moreover, this attitude would not only benefit the individual who keeps their beliefs, but also others around them.
First of all, one’s belief defines one’s identity. To compromise under several difficult circumstances may seem understandable, and may even be deemed as a gesture of flexibility. However, only the one who makes such decision could sense the feeling of self-betrayal, which secretly sabotages the foundations of their words and deeds, that is, the identities that determine them who they are. By compromising over and over again, one would gradually lose their perceptions of meanings and principles, and losing which is, recognized by many psychological professionals, one of the greatest causes of depression.
Furthermore, one’s very beliefs contributes to one’s community’s beliefs. That is to say, what kind of values define a community is decided by what kind of values define each and every member of that community. Hence, a society with members, instead of being determined to insist on what they regard as right and just, ready to compromise whenever feeling the need to do so could see real harms happen interpersonally and profoundly in society, from compromising to domestic abuses, to working-place sexual harassments, to government corruption, and to many other social issues.
As a result, compromising is not some little matter that only harms an individual’s feeling. As time goes by, such behavior could be devastating not only to the one who does so, but to the society they belong to as a whole. In conclusion, the statement that compromise is no harmful and thus legitimate is in reality no just superficial but actually detrimental. The world needs more people who are willing to adhere to their beliefs and are doing so for themselves as well as every other person in the same society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 318, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...rmful and thus legitimate is in reality no just superficial but actually detriment...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, well, while, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, as well as, first of all, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2180.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 421.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17814726841 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0288249096 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532066508314 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 684.9 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.563916349 60.3974514979 145% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.235294118 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7647058824 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3529411765 5.21951772744 198% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165811743293 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0558664556644 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0329482104163 0.0758088955206 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104077319791 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021666809157 0.0667264976115 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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