It is more harmful to compromise one's own beliefs than to adhere to them.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The statement argue that it is more harmful to compromise one’s own beliefs than to adhere to them. it is true that people who always shift sides does not seem appropriate, it would be better to compromise one’s own beliefs by simulating the good colleagues and receiving advice from the better to succeed in hectic modern society.
Perceiving new ideas is essential to survive and succeed in modern society. In the past, the changes of the nations, societies and individuals were small and trivial which makes living under sheer will is possible. however, as the time passes by the changes become faster and broader, thinking and executing new things become a primary thing to reach one’s goal. Samsung didn’t start as an electronic company, whose main profits come from semi conductor. however, during the IMF crisis, the leader of the Samsung made a motto, “change everything except wife” and seek for the better and more efficient way for the company. The motto made Samsung the best electronic company in not only Korea, but also in the world.
The proponents of the statement would contend that people who always compromise one’s own beliefs would always follow the trend, which makes them a part of the society. Staying at the majority won’t bring success, the uniqueness make a distance from the audience, provoking envy and admiration to them. The proponents claim that by sticking to the belief, the extraordinary idea will eventually come.
However, it is true that uniqueness is essential to be the head runner of the race, the proponents should recognized the extraordinary idea could also become quixotic, odorous idea. One of the exemplar would be the participants of the TV cooking show, Gordon Ramsay’s <hell’s kitchen="">. The participants of the show explain that the one’s cooking skills and methods are unique, but on the eyes of Ramsay, it is just all matter of fact useless. Ramsay gives advice, sometimes smoothly and sometimes harshly, and some accept them and the others don’t. As a result the people who make difficult to change one’s way that once thought it was special get good results and the others, assailed by the supreme, left the show.
When people start to race, there is little possibility that the skills and methods of oneself is the best way to do. As they go on, they would find the best way by comparing with others. By excluding bad ways from people who is behind and accepting good ways from people who is at the front, people learn what is the best way. when I was in high school, I wanted to get a high score on the test. I examined my classmates and found the student who achieved highest score on the previous test always participate the lecture actively. I threw my previous way of study away which is studying by myself and followed his way. As a result, I got significantly increased score on the test.
In conclusion, t would be better to compromise one’s own beliefs by simulating the good colleagues and receiving advice from the better.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
The statement argue that it is more harmful to compromise o...
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Suggestion: It
...e’s own beliefs than to adhere to them. it is true that people who always shift si...
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Suggestion: However
...es living under sheer will is possible. however, as the time passes by the changes beco...
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Suggestion: However
... main profits come from semi conductor. however, during the IMF crisis, the leader of t...
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Suggestion: When
...ont, people learn what is the best way. when I was in high school, I wanted to get a...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'achieved the highest'.
Suggestion: achieved the highest
...my classmates and found the student who achieved highest score on the previous test always parti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, in conclusion, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2533.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 513.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93762183236 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67568979459 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487329434698 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 762.3 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.635238147 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.541666667 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.375 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.75 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134946638228 0.243740707755 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0419153787445 0.0831039109588 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747254194866 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0872489648627 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0617773829333 0.0667264976115 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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