The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.

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The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.

With the development of technology, today’s life have become the most affluent and convenient in history. I tend to disagree with the statement. Although those who agree may suggest the reason of too much dependence on the machine, still my position stands for the reasons that will be suggested in the following.

Admittedly, due to technological advancement, people are getting rely on to machine. Since navigation always tells us how to get to the destination, we do not have to memorize the route anymore, which leads to deterioration of the memorization abilities. also, as people tend to communicate with their friends through Facebook messenger or Instagram rather than visiting their friends or talking on the phone, they might lose interpersonal skills because of the too much reliance on text message. However, it does not mean that being convenient does hinder people from becoming independent.

To begin with, with the development of information technology, people obtain more opportunities to do something new that would not possible in the past. For example, with the availability of GPS technology, people can travel around the world without worrying getting lost. also, automatic translator allows us to communicate with foreigners easily. without these technologies, we would give up exploring the world or depend on the people who might already know them well. Thus, such convenience allows people to try something new and less rely on the others.

Furthermore, more convenience helps people focus on more creative things rather than just repetitive jobs. For instance, in the automobile manufacturing factory, if there were no automatic machines in assembly lines, each individuals would assemble at all. but, with the machines, people do not have to do repetitive jobs any more and they can allocate their time to focus on the tasks that requires more creativity such as car design and Youtube marketing strategies, even though these kinds of machines make conveniences for people. Besides, as conveniences allows people to save their precious time but requires them to do more tasks than before, people have to finish their tasks within a short period, which would leads to development of strong features.

To sum up, I disagree with the statement. even though contemporary’s conveniences would leads to some negative impacts on human features, there are more positive impacts.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, thus, well, for example, for instance, such as, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 19.5258426966 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2053.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 379.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41688654354 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99767734038 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559366754617 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.444760653 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.055555556 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0555555556 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 5.21951772744 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156914446131 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510603630886 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479766890831 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0840395793077 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0150740157627 0.0667264976115 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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