A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
The education system in any nation is everchanging with the research and discoveries happening all around us. Students should be open-minded to new opportunities and also the competition around them. I agree with this suggestion and support that education should be equal all over the nation, however, placing restrictions will not be helpful in every situation.
To begin with, not every child in the nation has access to a proper education system due to the situation their ancestors or they currently are going through. For example, some may live in great metropolitan cities and have a life where education is available at their home or just a mile away. Students have access to new equipment and technology surrounding them which in turn results in greater knowledge from the get-go. However, in rural areas, new technology even, proper books to study would not have reached students so that they could compete in the real world. Hence, having a similar structure for everyone would not create any discrimination and help every student all around the nation to compete and also have a better life than what they are having right now.
However, the government cannot restrict someone who is trying to achieve or aiming for a higher goal that is not taught in the curriculum. Students, who want to learn more about a particular field, even do Master's and PhDs in the same field may get selected into ivy league colleges where they can pursue different courses which would definitely help them. Perhaps, they could invent a new technology that could be the greatest breakthrough of the century which in turn results in a bigger name for the nation. Hence, having the same curriculum after a certain level would not be fruitful for the nation of the student themselves.
Of course, there will always be differences in the education value from area to area as the teachers and their methods used to teach. However, this is the expected competition in the world, there will always be someone who is better than you. Furthermore, having the same syllabus for every student will definitely benefit till a certain point but then the government will definitely need to allow the students to take different and higher level courses.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 172, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding competition'?
Suggestion: the surrounding competition
...en-minded to new opportunities and also the competition around them. I agree with this suggestion and suppo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, then, for example, of course, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1863.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 373.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99463806971 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62258418432 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509383378016 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.8555136837 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.2 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8666666667 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.21951772744 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185159910923 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644774126104 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0333286169796 0.0758088955206 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110856157236 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0259814381301 0.0667264976115 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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