a nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you t

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a nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

In asserting that students are ought to study the same national curriculum until they enter college, the author has failed to acknowledge other diverse issues- students who have different talents and passions - besides students who have a similar passion. Nevertheless, I agree with the statement to the extent that the national curriculum might occur when only similar talents and passions are considered, in other cases, as will be elucidated in the points below, it will not be so.
Due to ambiguous nature of the argument, I assume the national curriculum to mean a similar curriculum that could work for all students. Admittedly, students are better off, in their youth, with a comprehensive and national curriculum. Not being worried about what to do with their future life, students put the burden of finding their inner talents on the shoulder of the government. Take for instance most 15-year-old high school students, most of them are not cognizant of what they want to do with their prospective educational life. Not to mention the fact that most high school students are by no means into education. A cousin of mine, age 16, who lives in Berlin, Germany could work as an example. He spends a plethora of times behind his computer, as most of his peers do. Obvious enough to say that most students are not well aware of what they want to do with their life, let alone their educational progress, or even choosing a field of study. Moreover, a national curriculum would help students to pass this era of uncertainty- which is most of the time because of puberty- and let them choose a major of study when they are wiser. Consequently, a national curriculum would be of much help in this age for students.
With these examples, it could be argued that the statement, having a national curriculum for all student until they enter college, would work. However, when viewed holistically, it is not so because different people have different talents and linking. A vivid example could shed light on my assertion. For instance, some students are known as prodigies and virtuosos- they might be into art, music, or sport- even before they enter the educational system. In Iran, a 3-year-old boy named Arat, has become viral in the World Wide Web. The little boy is a gymnastic prodigy. Being able to do backflips, he amazed the world around him to the extent that most News Broadcasting companies are either showing his videos or inviting him for a visit in their country. Uncovering his talent, his father knew as a fact that a national curriculum which might focus on math and physics would not be of help for a child like Arat. In fact, what Arat needs is support to become a national figure. Notwithstanding, people might want to undermine this assertion by saying such thinking applies to communities which have unfold gifted member. However, as I earlier said, I will maintain my stand that a national curriculum only work for student with similar likings, tendencies and talents.
To conclude, Contrary to the statementtest above, I agree with the statement only to the extent that it is limited with students who have similar liking and tendency.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1105, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'unfolded'.
Suggestion: unfolded
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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'consequently', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'well', 'for instance', 'in fact']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.220735785953 0.240241500013 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.157190635452 0.157235817809 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0969899665552 0.0880659088768 110% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0401337792642 0.0497285424764 81% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0602006688963 0.0444667217837 135% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.128762541806 0.12292977631 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0401337792642 0.0406280797675 99% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.6995224273 2.79330140395 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0317725752508 0.030933414821 103% => OK
Particles: 0.00167224080268 0.0016655270985 100% => OK
Determiners: 0.0836120401338 0.0997080785238 84% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0267558528428 0.0249443105267 107% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0250836120401 0.0148568991511 169% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3173.0 2732.02544248 116% => OK
No of words: 536.0 452.878318584 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.9197761194 6.0361032391 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.58838876751 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.335820895522 0.366273622748 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.253731343284 0.280924506359 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.192164179104 0.200843997647 96% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.113805970149 0.132149295362 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6995224273 2.79330140395 97% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 219.290929204 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470149253731 0.48968727796 96% => OK
Word variations: 55.4082157013 55.4138127331 100% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6194690265 116% => OK
Sentence length: 22.3333333333 23.380412469 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.831560255 59.4972553346 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.208333333 141.124799967 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 23.380412469 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.416666666667 0.674092028746 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 47.7064676617 51.4728631049 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.51298701299 1.64882698954 92% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.428849278931 0.391690518653 109% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.12448086591 0.123202303941 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0976456225879 0.077325440228 126% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.439479687004 0.547984918172 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.201639273551 0.149214159877 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148169993236 0.161403998019 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0960135158068 0.0892212321368 108% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.351969421586 0.385218514788 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.052259857319 0.0692045440612 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.331682186075 0.275328986314 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0249081147027 0.0653680567796 38% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.4325221239 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 7.22455752212 194% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.5995575221 162% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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