Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Population spur, economic boom and industrial growth has brought down the wilderness area all across the world to a crippling low. Deforestation and poaching of animals is rampant and if not controlled will eventually show its deleterious effect to the humanity. To preserve the remaining wilderness, every nation needs to take steps to counter further destruction of forests. Bringing laws will put stringent regulations on the wilderness and help in keeping the areas in its natural state.
From the ancient ages humans have peregrinated to explore fertile lands to cultivate and use natural resources for its benefit. In the process, the natural resources have been exploited severely. Although the use of the resources brought benefits to the civilization, we must realize that the world and the existence of the worldly creatures, including us, pivots on the balance of need and supply and not on greed and supply. Economic growth has given us the benefits and comforts in every aspect of our life. This very growth, in conjunction with greed, has destroyed massive forests, for mining and for poaching animals to get their skin or tasks for the rich to show off. With power comes huge responsibility - this simple yet powerful truth is the call of the day and we must listen to that to save the only planet inhabitable to living beings.
The millions of acres of forests provide oxygen to the world; it's apt to call such areas as the lungs of the world. Any harm to the forests will result in worse air quality, less preservation of ground water, drastic climate changes. We are not adept in such adaptation to massive changes in climate. Changes of this nature has already taken down the dinosaurs; changes that was arguably brought on by meteors hitting the earth - without any intervention of the living beings. We should not be the reason for our own destruction. Restraining the use of the nature needs educating the citizens and imposing laws to thwart the outlaws and the over enthusiastic businesses. We have reached a time when technological growth has brought innovations to solve problems with least resources and it's continuing to do so. Encouraging minimalistic approach in the consumption of resources will result in better preservation of the nature. So, the nations have to come up with initiatives to encourage using technology to better the problem solving and lessen the use of nature. Laws should be at par the necessity without being pernicious to the nature and not hindering the economic growth. The leaders of the nations has to realize the subtle difference between economic growth and economic gain. Growth should be all-encompassing - inclusive to the benefit of the civilization and preservance of the ecology - just enough for our needs. Gain always keeps greed as it's focus and greed always leads to destruction.
Also, to keep a balance in the flora and fauna of the ecology, it's important that we rationalize the benefits of keeping the wilderness in their natural state. Doesn't matter how digital and technology savvy a nation becomes, nature will always have its own lush beauty that can never be replaced. One can heal the scars, invisible to eyes, in the arms of mother nature and mere company of intelligent robots or social network can do nothing in that regard. It's in our benefit that we understand the cause and the nation has to take stance in that regard. Destruction is easy and is not always reversible. Myopic outlook will only bring temporary growth, if at all, and eventually cost more for the restoration of the nature. It's the fact that such destruction is brought on by only handful of people. Thus to control such behavior, it's necessary to impose stringent laws and even if that needs to regulate the development for economic gain.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eeping the areas in its natural state. From the ancient ages humans have peregr...
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Line 3, column 764, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the least'.
Suggestion: with the least
...s brought innovations to solve problems with least resources and its continuing to do so. ...
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Line 3, column 789, Rule ID: IT_IS[7]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...solve problems with least resources and its continuing to do so. Encouraging minima...
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Line 4, column 161, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: Doesn't
... the wilderness in their natural state. Doesnt matter how digital and technology savvy...
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Line 4, column 458, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
... network can do nothing in that regard. Its in our benefit that we understand the c...
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Line 4, column 726, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...more for the restoration of the nature. Its the fact that such destruction is broug...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...s brought on by only handful of people. Thus to control such behavior, its necessary...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, thus, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 98.0 58.6224719101 167% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3157.0 2235.4752809 141% => OK
No of words: 633.0 442.535393258 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98736176935 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.01592376844 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75765958926 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 303.0 215.323595506 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478672985782 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 980.1 704.065955056 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9403343051 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.838709677 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4193548387 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 5.21951772744 19% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218484028675 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565308643492 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523482670821 0.0758088955206 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139335198157 0.150359130593 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303684690531 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 153.0 100.480337079 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.