Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.

Essay topics:
Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.

Throughout the world, wildlife preservation has never ceased to draw public attention and provoke debates. Although many people believe that authorities of countries could not make use of wild areas for economic purposes, the issue as to whether legislators should issue laws to conserve those areas in their pristine form or not remains controversial. As far as I’m concerned, I agree that governments need to enforce laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas.

First, it is important to recognise that wild trees consume carbon dioxide and produce oxygen for human beings to breathe. However, the world witnessed many industrial revolutions, therefore harvesting rate increased dramatically which led to over-logging and deforestation. Consequently, the amount of carbon dioxide went up sharply, thus human health is negatively affected since breathing becomes more difficult. Suppose, for example, Beijing is one of the most air-polluted cities in China as this country has developed precipitately without considering to protect the environment. This example indicates that overutilization natural resources is detrimental for not only wildlife but also people’s daily life.

Second, it is equally important to recognise that the exhaustive use of wilderness areas could engender climate change. Many people may argue that this phenomenon is just theoretical and not researched clearly and humans do not need to be overdramatic. Nevertheless, they are ignorant of the fact that nature is undergoing many serious occurrences due to the invasion of human beings. For instance, deforestation leads to carbon dioxide emissions which is the cause of the greenhouse effect and global warming. Therefore, the awareness of protecting the natural world is crucial for both current generation and descendants.

Finally, passing laws to conserve remaining natural areas does not mean that it would damage economic gain. The governments could consider to implement laws that not only keeping the natural world safe but also gaining economic benefits. To illustrate, Tesla, a world leader company in electric vehicle innovation, has been planning to construct a factory in a forest area of Germany; the authority accepts this plan with a constraint that the company has to plant numerous trees to replace the demolished forest. Hence, the authority could have a cake and eat it too.

In conclusion, taking all the above mentioned reasons, it is plausible for nations to legalize laws to protect any left over wilderness areas and could also take advantage of those areas.

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Average: 8.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 233, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
... areas for economic purposes, the issue as to whether legislators should issue laws to conser...
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Line 3, column 547, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'considering protecting'.
Suggestion: considering protecting
...try has developed precipitately without considering to protect the environment. This example indicates...
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Line 7, column 131, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[3]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'consider implementing'.
Suggestion: consider implementing
...ge economic gain. The governments could consider to implement laws that not only keeping the natural ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, thus, as for, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2198.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 394.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.57868020305 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01353590399 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58883248731 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7326184042 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.111111111 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8888888889 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.11111111111 5.21951772744 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36007405818 0.243740707755 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0937174031128 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0891247701623 0.0758088955206 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187320068555 0.150359130593 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0800072248253 0.0667264976115 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 48.8420337079 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 12.1639044944 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.85 8.38706741573 117% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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