People who are the most deeply committed to an idea or policy are also the most critical of it.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In deve

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People who are the most deeply committed to an idea or policy are also the most critical of it.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

most peoples believe that they are most meticulous for an idea when they deeply committed to it. however, I still remain doubt to this claim. In some case, peoples make their decision with emotion rather that ration. In this essay, I will try to illustrate it.

Firstly, no one can deny that individual should hold a belief with deep thinking and scrutiny. when you are perfunctory to make a decision, it will bring some potential dangers. For example, some people hold the belief that building more and more road could release the pressure of traffic jam. however, according some professional stimulations and experience, increasing the number of roads will attract more and more vehicle, thus the dilemma would not be solving. therefore, the government should be critical of a propose when the government try to committed to it. Similarly, the individual also be careful to committed any idea, just like investing to some company or choose a school for their child.

however, in the most situation, people fellow some belief with emotion rather than ration. this is a nature and shortcoming of human, no one could escape from it. according the subject of folk psychology, when some individual come together and move as a group, they are more likely to be allure by some illusion and be crazy for some hilarious idea that seems impossible when people move as an individual. A lamented example is the nazi germany. Although germany are home for a lot of brilliant philosopher, this country give the birth to one of the evilest party of human history. Additionally, most of resident of germany agree with the policy of nazi government. they oppressed and murder Jews, which seems impossible and hard to understand for normal people. Actually, they deeply committed for the policy without any independent and critical thinking. this phenomenon also pervasive in our daily life. For example, when people see a scandal about some stars or politician they do not like from media, they are tend to believe it rather than keep an critical thinking and judge authentic.

therefore, as far as I am concerned, in some case, people could not be critical for some idea which they deeply commit.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, however, if, similarly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1853.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 366.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06284153005 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63089076027 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.494535519126 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.0176052412 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2380952381 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4285714286 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80952380952 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222364618862 0.243740707755 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695399084867 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634371609891 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157800384624 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348356431123 0.0667264976115 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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