People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and suppo

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People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

The environment where one grows determines the behavior of people. However, some exceptions exists, I concede the behavior of people is fixed by the forces and not solely determined by their own making for three reasons.

Growing the same plant in different environments results in difference in these plants. Similarly, a child growing up in disciplined family differs from a child grown up by reckless family. This shows the role of external force, here it is environment, in determining ones behavior.

Also, being a social animal, society and the behavior which is respectful in the society is easily accepted by any people in the society. Whereas, the things which is not easily accepted in by the society is difficult to be accepted by any member of the society. For example, eating beef is not accepted in Hindu culture which is very popular feed in western society. So, the one who wants to feed on beef can not have beef within Hindu society.

Moreover, in a democratic country governed by the constitution, the behavior of the citizen is determined by the constitution itself but not by his or her own opinion. As an example, Polygamy is regarded as a crime in Nepal and hence people do not think about having multiple marital relationship. Whereas in some Muslim countries, polygamy is their tradition and easily have multiple marital relationship.

However, some exception are available in any field where their own making determines their behavior. For example a thief is not allowed to steal by rules and regulations in the country, but still he makes the crime by his own though. This act is not determined by the external force but by his own making. But ultimately, he is punished by the law, and hence those behavior not influenced by external forces ultimately gets punished by the external force.

In conclusion, there might be some exceptions, but generally, behavior of people is determine by external force and not solely by their own making.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 269, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
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Line 5, column 139, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... accepted by any people in the society. Whereas, the things which is not easily accepte...
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Line 9, column 360, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this behavior' or 'those behaviors'?
Suggestion: this behavior; those behaviors
...y, he is punished by the law, and hence those behavior not influenced by external forces ultim...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, moreover, similarly, so, still, whereas, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1646.0 2235.4752809 74% => OK
No of words: 330.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98787878788 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79388187675 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 215.323595506 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478787878788 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.759706625 60.3974514979 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.8235294118 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4117647059 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76470588235 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189741174773 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0668320262368 0.0831039109588 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540030925677 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10792011005 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564221802372 0.0667264976115 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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