The behavior of people refers to the actions and choices made by them to achieve or reach certain goals. Some argue that all these actions are largely if not completely controlled by external forces but the other ones think that we have the complete control over our actions. I believe that most of our actions are controlled by external forces and merely are those actions that are made based on our own intention.
First of all, humans are definitely not free to do all what they want as there are many hindrances such as laws that we have to abide by. Indeed, our freedom in making some actions is limited thus we do not have a free will. For example, if someone wants to travel from a country to the other there are a lot of papers that need to be prepared and the person should ask for a visa that can be refused,so they can not travel even if that person lives on the border and they only have to walk to reach their wanted destination.
Secondly, all humans are born with a clear mind. That is to say, their mind was a clean white paper. A lot of our behaviors have been instilled and written in that paper through education. The question to be asked is: If we lived alone and nobody ever made us learn the behaviors we know, would we act the we are now? I do not think that our behavior would be shaped the way it is now, a multitude of things would be different and our actions will be shaped by the results and needs. By way of illustration, kids if not taught that they should eat in a certain manner, their eating will be shaped by how much hungry they are. They are taught that they should eat slowly without making a mess but if not they will eat the way that will appease their desire. Moreover, religion such as Islam forces people to act a certain way by making its followers refrain from a number of things that we biologically need such as some types of food and sexual relationships.
Thirdly, as stated in the beginning most actions are controlled by outside powers yet some actions, even if not controlled, are common between everyone because their outcome is harmful. We have a body that has a number of essential needs and is weak so it needs protection from all dangers. In addition, It can be clear that the majority of laws that constrain our behavior are laws that are respected because if not we will be hurt. In a car, for example, the driver needs to protect the passengers and themselves from accidents by respecting the driving code. This act is not mainly done because the driver does not have a choice or because they will be punished, even if in reality the opposite might happen, but mainly because it will be dangerous otherwise.
In conclusion, most of our acts are controlled by outside forces, whether it is humans or nature there are always laws and constraints. Thus, humans have little to no control over their actions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 199, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...completely controlled by external forces but the other ones think that we have th...
^^
Line 3, column 184, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d, our freedom in making some actions is limited thus we do not have a free will....
^^
Line 3, column 360, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... that need to be prepared and the person should ask for a visa that can be refuse...
^^
Line 3, column 403, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , so
...hould ask for a visa that can be refused,so they can not travel even if that perso...
^^^
Line 3, column 419, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...visa that can be refused,so they can not travel even if that person lives on the ...
^^
Line 5, column 178, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tilled and written in that paper through education. The question to be asked is: ...
^^
Line 5, column 271, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... alone and nobody ever made us learn the behaviors we know, would we act the we a...
^^^
Line 5, column 306, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'we'?
Suggestion: the; we
...n the behaviors we know, would we act the we are now? I do not think that our behavi...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 814, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...igion such as Islam forces people to act a certain way by making its followers re...
^^
Line 7, column 418, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e laws that are respected because if not we will be hurt. In a car, for example, ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, thus, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 19.5258426966 195% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 33.0505617978 203% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2350.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 526.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46768060837 5.05705443957 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36957491567 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433460076046 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 736.2 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1751496056 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.904761905 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0476190476 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38095238095 5.21951772744 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0555500552853 0.243740707755 23% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0208783574428 0.0831039109588 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0147362419972 0.0758088955206 19% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0336612488855 0.150359130593 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0166380835223 0.0667264976115 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.8420337079 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 12.1639044944 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.