A person who knowingly commits a crime has broken the social contract and should not retain any civil rights or the rights to benefit from his or her own labor

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A person who knowingly commits a crime has broken the social contract and should not retain any civil rights or the rights to benefit from his or her own labor.

Breaking a law in any country is considered as a crime, whether the crime is performed knowingly or unknowingly, it anyway breaks the law. Many believe that if a person knowingly commits crime, then he or she must not retain any civil rights. Yes, it is reasonable to agree with the author about taking away the rights after the crime could be the justice, but many believe that it depends on what type of crime the person makes. If he breaks a trafffic law and drives without following any rules then it is not reasonable to take away his rights to drive, instead he must be punished with harsh fines. I partly agree with the author that if a person knowingly commits crime then one should take away the civil rights from the culprit for the following reasons.

Firstly, it is true that if a person is making a crime even after he or she knows that it is not a legal movement to perform such act, then still giving the civil rights to the culprit is not agreeable. This would encourage more people to perform crime which will break more social contracts and there will be no fear in any person to perform crimes. Consider, breaking a shop and stealing all the things from the shop by pointing the gun at the owner, the law should immediately take back his gun licence and should never be able to get his gun licence back. Definetely for crimes like these should be taken a harsh steps against them and taking away his or her civil rights is considerable. One would not perform such crimes if he or she knows the outcomes after getting caught.

However, taking the civil rights and all the benefits from his or her own labor is not agreeable for all the crimes. Some crimes that even though made knowingly, still should not be punished harshly such that he or she can not be able to retain any civil rights. Take for example, driving a car at prohibited area, if a person drives car at prohibited area then he should be fined for it but not punished so harshly that taking away the rights to drive. For crimes like these, it is not reasonable to take away all their benefits and civil rights. Sometimes this could be injustice to people for performing such small crimes that could be easily given another chance to the culprit.

In conclusion, one should retain or should not retain his or her civil rights or the benefits from his or her own labor should depend on the crime he or she performs. If one performs an unforgiveable crime then it is reasonable not to give back civil rights but if the crime is such where he or she can be punished with not that harsh punishment, in such case he should be able to retain the civil rights.

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Average: 5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 618, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'step'?
Suggestion: step
...imes like these should be taken a harsh steps against them and taking away his or her...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, first, firstly, however, if, so, still, then, for example, in conclusion, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2159.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 485.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45154639175 5.05705443957 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28154927757 2.79657885939 82% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.360824742268 0.4932671777 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 668.7 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 41.0197015708 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5294117647 23.4991977007 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70588235294 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.397343021158 0.243740707755 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163958332182 0.0831039109588 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112319780688 0.0758088955206 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288602131495 0.150359130593 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.057502709042 0.0667264976115 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 48.8420337079 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 12.1743820225 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 12.1639044944 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.38706741573 84% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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