Society should identify those children who have special talents and provide training for them at an early age to develop their talents.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
In society, we come across a lot of children showing special talents in diverse fields like sports, arts, science and so on. But, due to several reasons, like economic condition of family, absence of contacts, they are not able to transform their sparking talent into burning fire. These kind of situations call for special upliftment by society. On the other hand, every child is uniquely talented, as the talent is vaguely defined. On grounds of equalty, society should not discriminate between children on basis of having certain qualities. This may lead to widening the gap between children who having less and more "talent".
In some strata of society, there are always children, who are talented, but are not able to develop their unique talent, due to lack of resources avaialble to them, like poor financial condition of the family, no network of contacts. For example, a child having a natural inclination and talent for athletics, can be left behind on account of not getting the proper guidance, due to being forced to work, on account of a poor financial condition. Such children, should definitely be given a helping hand by the society, to nurture their talent. Wherever the lack of resources is the prime obstacle in nurturing of talent, the gap should be bridged by the society pitching in. Proper encouragement and nurturing is essential for talent in children to grow and develop into something meaningful that creates an impact in society.
On the other hand, the concept of talent is vaguely defined. All children develop at their own pace, and all have some special quality present in them. So, to say that these set of children are more talented than the others would not be such a right thing to say. In society, opportunity for growth should be equally available to all, and should not be favourable for a particular set of children. If a child is genuinely interested and talented in a particular field, he will automatically come forward and his talent will shine, given he is provided as much resources as the others. An unequal distribution of resources would give an unfair advantage to some at the cost of others. This can cause the gap in society to increase, which is harmful to the society.
Thus, to conclude, upliftment by the society is required for children with talent but with insufficient resources at disposal. If care is not taken with regards to whom special training is given, inequality can be introduced into the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 283, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...heir sparking talent into burning fire. These kind of situations call for special upliftme...
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Line 5, column 556, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ent will shine, given he is provided as much resources as the others. An unequal dis...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, thus, for example, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2070.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 417.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96402877698 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75683227948 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484412470024 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.38483146067 274% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9186765166 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.5 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.85 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.15 5.21951772744 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253318253542 0.243740707755 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.082158762378 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397631621119 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168124934588 0.150359130593 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0195668315973 0.0667264976115 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.