Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take

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Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.

Extiction of different species of animals is a major threat in present world. Many are already extinct and many are in verge of extinction. Nothing can be done to regenerate the animals that are no longer available in Earth but some activities and laws can dodge the debacle for the endangered animals. The prompt discusses that the efforts to protect these rare wildlife be focussed to those whose number are reducing due to human activites. I mostly disagree with the prompt and provide two reasons to warrant that other factors are more important for the decline in number of the animals. However, I concede a few cases where attention on human activites resulted decrease can produce better outcome.
First of all, nature is an incomprehensible, difficult to interpret and has its own pattern of activity. Noone can avoid a natural disaster but we definately can work to reduce frequency and outcome of bad natural phenomena. One major cause of reduction in number of many animals is spread of malignant disease causing death of the species. There are many news of hundreds of animals found death in a certain location naturally. If we neglect these factors it gets spread and threatens the existence of animal. People can work for development of vaccine and provide it to the animal before it gets sick. Also, vaccination of infected wildlife can avoid spread of the disease and help to cicumvent the potential extinction.
Secondly, another major cause for complete destruction of species is due to natural fire in large forest. These conflarations damage the habitat of many plants and animals. Large number of plants which can only be found in a certain location are totally burned and also animals found in only the particular area are fully removed. These natural fire are not human activities but a crucial factor for wane of many species and an eye must be kept for reduction in the damage as well as frequency of the fire.
Despite all other factors, human beings are also one of the major deterrant of large number of species. Many trees are cut down for area of settelment and for fire purposes. Large number of animals are killed for their valuable organs used in medical fields as well as decoration. Poaching is one of the major cause to decrease the quantity of many animals. Steps to protect the endangered species due to human activites is a direct approach and a fruitful task to protect the wildlife in a small time duration. For example, the number of Bengal Tiger in Nepal was 56 in 2005. When the government declared the protection of these tigers and enforced strict rules for killing of them and also allocated Khaptad National Park for preserving them, their number increased gradually and by 2018 the number of Bengal Tigers in Nepal were around 1200. These process that dissuade humans activity that threatens wildlife is fuitful and the positive outcome can be felt in near future.
Thus, in conclusion, efforts must be made for protection of the plants and animals that are in verge of extinction becasue their presence is a boon to humans in a direct or indirect way. But the steps must not only be directed to human activites but other factors in play that have greater influence must be considered.

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Average: 5.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 351, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...causing death of the species. There are many news of hundreds of animals found death...
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Line 2, column 351, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun news seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much news', 'a good deal of news'.
Suggestion: much news; a good deal of news
...causing death of the species. There are many news of hundreds of animals found death in a...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2689.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 552.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87137681159 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84713113593 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56972131322 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458333333333 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 882.9 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.1187732956 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5925925926 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4444444444 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 5.13820224719 292% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140213327298 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0395537181718 0.0831039109588 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0321750545759 0.0758088955206 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0875755523539 0.150359130593 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0417764797582 0.0667264976115 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 100.480337079 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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