Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take.

Since the existence of the earth many species have prospered in the harmony with other species. For millions of years, prior to the evolution o f humans, flora and fauna, have contributed to each other’s existence. But it was coveting humans, who has devoted to the loss of habitat of other species bringing many of them to the brink of extinction. There is an old adage that “if there were no wilderness, the humans would die in 50 years and if there were no humans, other species would have prospered”. This apothegm elucidates the reality of today's world.
In my opinion, there is no other contributor than humans for the plight of endangered species. Although there have been several species going extinct prior to human evolution but extant fossils suggest that those extinctions were caused by the drastic changes in the ecology of the earth by itself. No evidence has been found to claim that one species superiority lead to the extinction of others. In modern era of industrialization, plethora of studies have concluded that other species have paid the price of human growth. Consider for example, owing to the increasing population, the demand for food has increased several folds over last few decades. The price of this shortfall in food is being paid by the marine species specially by Blue Tuna fish. Due to over-fishing in the Atlantic and Pacific Ocean, biologists quantify, that the number of fishes has plummet by 80% over last two decades. This drastic change has not only threatened the Blue Tuna fish but also human’s own survival due to imbalance in the food chain.
In addition to that, human activities, advertently or inadvertently, contribute to loss of habitat of other species. Building dams, to meet the growing needs of human’s, is another good example of their role in disturbing ecological balance. Beavers, once flourished all across over African continent. They play a vital role in maintaining the ecological balance by creating But since almost most of the water is stored in dams for electricity production, beavers lost their habitat as rivers dry up. The dried rivers not only threatened the very survival of Beavers but the fish, which grow in the dams and canals built by Beavers, have also gone extinct.
In conclusion, directly or indirectly, humans have devoted to the cause of many other pieces and pristine wilderness. The rising temperatures of oceans, due to global warming, has also proved detrimental to aquatic life. So, if we humans don’t take the right step to protect endangered wildlife, we will be doomed all to soon.

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Average: 5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 482, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...mportance of nature for their survival. While dwelling into impacts of this policy wi...
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Line 5, column 398, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...m is, for instance, the ecology of earth that is changing since it came into exis...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2343.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 459.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1045751634 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78788285431 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522875816993 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 739.8 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5299461012 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.571428571 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8571428571 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213796139408 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640468288802 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471061197243 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134144033574 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0291237420305 0.0667264976115 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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