Some people argue that successful leaders in government, industry, or other fields must be highly competitive. Other people claim that in order to be successful, a leader must be willing and able to cooperate with others.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The prompt stated that preparing young people in the society with as sense for cooperation for future leadership role in the society is better than installing them with competition. In my opinion, I completely agree with the statement and argue that a leader that couldn't cooperate with his coworker is not a leader for two reasons.
To begin, one might argued that leadership need to motivately pushes his/her employees to be able to keep up with the market, aiming to complete with the best in their field. However, as the name leader suggests the role of the leader to lead their team, not the competitor or any external party. Hence, leader's majority of the time should not be looking externally, competitors and the market, but rather should be focusing on improvement internally. Although competition is needed in the commercial and poticial world, Therefore, leader should focus on cooperation and organization of his/her team. Interaction skill would be the key factor in success in the leadership role.
Second, as government or cooperation are a group of individual working as one identity for a common cause, compromize and negiociation between different function will be common issue for leader. Leader must be able to recognized their differences and find common solution that slooth both parties. In dealing with such issue, installing the sense competition would not be beneficial to both the leader nor the working body. For instances, the prime minister of Thailang between 2005 and 2008, Thanksin Sinnwat, is a competitive business ma. One of the policy installed in the thai government under Thanksin Sinnawat is to install an performance indications or KPI with each public function body and their sucess would be judge against each other, affecting their increased salary and funding in the next year. Within in a year, denigrations between hospital and distrinct skyrocket, driving the country into chaos. The government functions soon failed due the competition raised by one leader. This story should serve as a reminder to the society that a good leader should serve and provide support to his/her body, not competion among themselve.
Although it could be argued that a leader should be ambious and demanding their governed body to be compete with other body, leader should be provide and organize to such body to be equiped to be sucessful. Therefore, he himself must contain the quality of workteam and coroborations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 265, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
... statement and argue that a leader that couldnt cooperate with his coworker is not a le...
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Line 9, column 631, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...t under Thanksin Sinnawat is to install an performance indications or KPI with eac...
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Line 13, column 143, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'provided'?
Suggestion: provided
...mpete with other body, leader should be provide and organize to such body to be equiped...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 396.0 442.535393258 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21464646465 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78962007361 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530303030303 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1078421782 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.470588235 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2941176471 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76470588235 5.21951772744 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335360493887 0.243740707755 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105114106047 0.0831039109588 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0782184066074 0.0758088955206 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.22202880041 0.150359130593 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0723071186186 0.0667264976115 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.