Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a field of study. Others believe that college students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Choosing of one's college major is not a trivial job. In fact , entering student doesn't ruminate much about it ,and it take students months or years to make decision ,which they immediately second guess. The prompt recommends that student must not confuse to choose a path and simply choose path that conforms their interest and skills. In my opinion i strongly agree with this suggestion and argue that students should look upon their interest when choosing college courses for two reasons.
Job market is shifting, one decade one job is dominating and another decade takes place. Thus to choose on's course based on job availability is a short-term perspective,one which will backfire. In 19th century nuclear engineering was rapidly growing field. Powerful countries were not only designing and manufacturing weapons, but also constructing nuclear plants. So , nuclear graduates were able to find high paying job just after graduation. However, due to issue related to nuclear accident like Fukushima disaster, many country are moving away from this to green technology. Thus, the 19th century student choosing nuclear engineering face job crisis. Thus job market is not consistent ,its fickle. Will software engineering will have job prospect in future?History tells us it will not.
Further,job market is dynamic ,it's not unchanging like gravity.So one should pursue his her interest .Happiness level plays a crucial part in how effectively we work.Example, a student passionate about horse training takes software engineering as his major because of plethora of job. Later,she may find herself lacking enthusiasm,hates her job and find no joy to continue it. Her job efficiency lacks and hazards occurs.Thus happiness plays a vital role on work efficiency. In other words, people find a satisfaction in their craft work more fastly and more productively.Government on macro scale should emphasize more on encouraging student to pursue their career based on their passion because long-term and productiveness leads to smooth functioning of economy.
Of course ,some argue that in our increasing globalized competition for jobs have skyrocketed and thus it is important to pursue practical path. However, isn't that precisely why we should follow our skill and interest? If we do we are likely to do best job ,and possibly compete at higher level.
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...but also constructing nuclear plants. So , nuclear graduates were able to find hig...
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...job efficiency lacks and hazards occurs.Thus happiness plays a vital role on work ef...
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... work efficiency. In other words, people find a satisfaction in their craft work ...
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...oth functioning of economy. Of course ,some argue that in our increasing global...
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...t? If we do we are likely to do best job ,and possibly compete at higher level.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, second, so, thus, in fact, of course, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 369.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38482384824 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01621225124 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 215.323595506 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615176151762 0.4932671777 125% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 64.9180252318 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.35 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.45 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 29.0 7.80617977528 372% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264564457303 0.243740707755 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709111569515 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586883859153 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147341490893 0.150359130593 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.073713327891 0.0667264976115 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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