"Some people believe that competition for high grades motivates students to excel in the classroom. Others believe that such competition seriously limits the quality of real learning." - Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns

Nowadays, almost all educational institutes value meritocracy; good marks entails good praise from the teachers. Students are thus motivated to work harder to achieve higher grades. While achieving higher grades is always desirable, contention among students can qualify the quality of the real learning process. The given prompt provides two contrasting views on whether strong competition bolsters or undermines the quality of reading. My views mostly align with the view that competition can undermine the quality of reading on the basis of two reasons.

To start with, too much competitiveness in the class can encourage a rot-memorization culture. Thus students are more focused on memorizing like a parrot rather than understanding it. For example, in a class with high competition for the grades, most students may study only the “important” or the lecture notes for the exam. Books usually take a long time to comprehend but it is the best source of information. To expedite their reading process students may undermine the latter in favor of the first. Although students can pass or even get a good mark studying the lecture notes, his real knowledge is not through if he studied without comprehending the subject matters.
Additionally, excessive competition can weaken the morale of some students. In any class there are some naturally good test-takers who are not only good in pressure situations but also can write according to the teacher’s convenience. Other students are always inclined to think of the good test takers great talents and thus assume these talented students can perform well anywhere in their life. However, classroom success does not correlate overall success; but praising a good “test-taker” can instill a misguided notion in fledging minds that classroom success correlates to overall success.
In my opinion, competition generally undermines real learning but the first intention of introducing “competition as a way of improving” was good. For example, a student was second in a class by 1 grade. Perhaps he might be more inclined to put in one extra hour studies per day to top the class. There might be an extra incentive to study rather than procrastinating. Although competition can be good on a basic level, it might hamper the actual learning as mentioned in the above paragraphs.
In conclusion, we live in a competitive world and we face competition at every nooks and corner. Although competition can bring the best out of someone, it seriously undermines the roles of other factors like confidence, teamwork and personal relationship required for success.

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Average: 7.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 96, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, to start with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2232.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 415.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37831325301 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24959213359 2.79657885939 116% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573493975904 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 692.1 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.5215226966 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.454545455 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8636363636 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90909090909 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24239848189 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706789234175 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543384941576 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137559212548 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179164269169 0.0667264976115 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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