Some people believe it is often necessary, even desirable, for political leaders to withhold information from the public. Others believe that the public has a right to be fully informed

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Some people believe it is often necessary, even desirable, for political leaders to withhold information from the public. Others believe that the public has a right to be fully informed

In our society, there is debatable issue whethere it is necessary for political leaders to open their information to public. Granted, opening information to the public is indispensible for political leaders. However, in some cases the information should be withheld from the public. Those dicisions would be determined by different circumstances.

First, I believe the political imformation of leaders should be withheld with them when they can reap benefician from it. For example of Osama Bin Laden who was the most dangerous criminal in the USA. He distoryed building in a city and killed many innocent people by abysmal terror. After the catastophy he hid in somewhere in the world. Burak Obama who was once president of the USA planned a secret project to find his nest and finally arrested him. In this case, if the information about the secret mission was revealed to the public, it would hamper the mission and give an another chance to the criminal to runaway. Thus, information should be withheld in such cases.

However, in some cases holding information from public could cause an adverse condition. Public should be announced with the information that might affect their lives. In Gulf of Mexico, there was terrific oil spill on the ocean. The oil was very detrimental to the ocean environment and also the human life. Therefore, the government of Mexico determined to disclose the information to their people. Due to the divulgment, they can avoid to use contaminated water and prevent themselves from hazard. For those reason, political leaders should consider, does disclosed information would affect public in a good way.

In summary, due to the examples and reasons I mentioned above, the political leaders should judge their decision by whether the information could reap beneficial effect or not, when it was revealed to the public. If they do so, I believe they could make more acceptable decision.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 285, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...many innocent people by abysmal terror. After the catastophy he hid in somewhere in t...
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Line 3, column 577, Rule ID: AN_ANOTHER[1]
Message: One of these determiners is redundant in this context. Choose only one: 'a chance' or 'another chance'.
Suggestion: a chance; another chance
...c, it would hamper the mission and give an another chance to the criminal to runaway. Thus, infor...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, in summary, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1616.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 313.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16293929712 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78295850981 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543130990415 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 704.065955056 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4607267222 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.8 118.986275619 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.65 23.4991977007 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 5.21951772744 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358497292157 0.243740707755 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109582137009 0.0831039109588 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0951070664075 0.0758088955206 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236968900524 0.150359130593 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.085145605741 0.0667264976115 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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