Some people believe it is often necessary, even desirable, for political leaders to withhold information from the public. Others believe that the public has a right to be fully informed.Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns

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Some people believe it is often necessary, even desirable, for political leaders to withhold information from the public. Others believe that the public has a right to be fully informed.

Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.

it is being stated that for most of the time, it is necessary that the political leaders constrain the spreading of information to the public. In my opinion, the condition where this statement holds true depends on the type of the information.

information that is related to the military protection, weapons should be withhold from the public. if all of the information concerning the national defence system of a country is released to the public, then it will become one of the weaknesses of this country and other nations might utilize this weak point to threat this country’s leader to make decision that benefit them.

However, information associated with a country’s leaders uses of funds that belongs to the country should be transparent. Recently, China has been working with the eradication of corruption in the government system. After a number of censorship, an unexpectedly high number of governors were found using the country’s money for private use and receive brides from others. corruption is a big threat to a country’s integrity and peacefulness; when a country’s leader is no longer trustworthy and could not serve as a good representative of a country, citizens will rebel and in the worst scenario, the country will turn into a chaos.

Moreover, information regarding to the food safety should also be fully informed to the public. Once in the past, one of the Chinese dairy company had used low quality milk to produce the milk powder for babies. At that time, the information related to the product was not accurately and fully presented to public, so nobody in the market could realize the potential harm of consuming this milk powder, and a disaster happened. By drinking this milk powder everyday, a great number of innocent life was taken because of the harmful chemicals contained in the product. Back to that time, if government were being more stringent about the food safety and publicized all relevant information, the public could have been more aware when selecting products and the loss of those babies could have been prevented.

In sum, when considering which information should be withhold from the pubic, one should think about whether the release of the information will lead to potential harm to the country and the community as a whole. if the answer is no, then citizens should have the right to be informed; oppositely, information should be securely protected.

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Average: 7.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Line 11, column 75, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
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...ons should be withhold from the public. if all of the information concerning the n...
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... should be withhold from the public. if all of the information concerning the national def...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun censorship seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much censorship', 'a good deal of censorship'.
Suggestion: much censorship; a good deal of censorship
...ruption in the government system. After a number of censorship, an unexpectedly high number of governo...
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...io, the country will turn into a chaos. Moreover, information regarding to the f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, then, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2091.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 398.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25376884422 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94112086021 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505025125628 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.4155256139 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.4 118.986275619 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5333333333 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2 5.21951772744 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200602302636 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786005911053 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682306245644 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119484920113 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373681874417 0.0667264976115 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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