Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Modern technology is now so omnipresent and prevailing our lifes, thus many issues related to the new technology have been grown toward both positive and negative effects. One of the issues is that development of technology conspicuously reduces our opportunities for human interaction. However, this statement seems quite extreme because of the reasons I would like to elaborate at the following essay.
Admittedly, the argument that technology prevents us to meet in a real life may be plausible in certain circumstances. For example, after the mobile phone had invented, we have been likely to talk with our friends through a useful electric device than meeting face to face. Nobody cannot deny that we have been lived in more convenient environment than before, however in real life, the chances we meet our families, friends, or colleagues have been seriously decreased. On the other side, video and computer games have made many people enjoy their life in cyberworld, not in real life. In many countries, addiction in those games have been an important problem especially in younger people. Even when making appointments with our friend, in many cases they are likely to meet in playing games. In the lights of abovementioned parts, the concern about diminishing human interaction from new technology seems compelling in some situations.
However, in many sides, the modern techonology have actually enhanced the possibility to increase the interaction among human. The marvelous inventions in transportation such as airplane, express train, and ‘car’ could make us connect with one another, even he or she is very far from us. If mass transportation system did not systemed in my city, I could not imagine how can I meet my girlfriend whom everyday I missed. Furthermore, even the information technology have been significantly permeated in our life. Skype, one of the most popular utility for ‘FACE TALK’, have helped me connect with my best friends living in other city, even Netherlands about 10,000 km far from here.
In conclusion, I do not think the human interaction limited in a real life. There are so many people we want to meet, even have to interact with because of many reasons such as job, official affairs, and commonplace. The technology really makes the process of human interaction more efficiently and conveniently ever than before. The point is not suppressing the development of new technology, but the serious and deliberate concerns about the possible deficits from its development.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, furthermore, however, if, may, really, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2144.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 404.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30693069307 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02227215964 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571782178218 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.2650185518 60.3974514979 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 112.842105263 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2631578947 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252263278129 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0807707078514 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717048643043 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15792341857 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0357714167422 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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