Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another.Write a res

Essay topics:

Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe that technology provides us with new and better ways to communicate and connect with one another.

Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.

The prompt insists that in contemporary life video camera has become important form of documentation because it provides correct and convincing recordings than a written record. Although, I agree that a video provides a more balanced and exact record of an event's spatial aspects, there are more things to record in life than what we see and hear. Thus, the speaker overstates the comparative significance of video as a documentation tool.

For the purpose of documenting spatial and temporal event that bears much emotion and significance, I agree that video documents are superior than any other type of documents. A wedding reception in video camera can be played again and again but how astute person observe the event and write a diary never be same as the video itself. A football world cup winning scenario or the independence of a nation after a brutal war by the confession of the opponent commander in chief is not replicable by any writing documentation ever written. BBC's planet Earth and human planet documentation illustrate many unknown and surprising information about the living organisms with the perfect scenario recorded by a video a camera and a narrator saying the information behind the every scenario is one of those documentation where both writing documentation or precisely observation of person and a video playing in front made superior than only video documentary.

Admittedly, video documentation gives much more information and accuracy in case of moving objects or where direct view of the events is more important than written description of the events. In case of different natural disasters that hits our community or criminal activity that occurs in our street is more efficient and accurate in video documentation because in this issue spatial and accurate view is important in making decision than writing description of that particular event. A written description of a criminal records in it's best can be a best seller book of the year but it won't count as a evidence of the crime in any court.

Conversely, historical events that occurred in the recent past or in the distant place where we can't observe the event directly, writing plays an important role to deeply understand the matter than the video documentation of that event. A video documentation of a event always miss the big idea and big picture of that specific event, because it's not possible to make video of the all aspects of a event. In writing documentation it can be described very vividly and persuasively where video documentation fails. Thought of an astute observer very easily and convincingly conveys in a written documentation, that depicts strong picture of the event in the readers mind.

Culture and history are more vivid and convival in the writing documents than in video documents. In case of diverse perspective of life like nostalgic moment of our childhood best depict in the written documentary. quantitive prospect of education of learning or any theory is more convincing in written form where qualitative prospect of education and theory much learnable in video recording.

In sum, both of these two version of documentation plays significant in some specific area, and it is not easy to conclude that one of them is superior than other in every aspects of life. In case where video camera fall short writing documents is superior in that specific sector.

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Average: 1.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 255, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an event' or simply 'events'?
Suggestion: an event; events
...des a more balanced and exact record of an events spatial aspects, there are more things ...
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Line 5, column 143, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[1]
Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
...agree that video documents are superior than any other type of documents. A wedding ...
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Line 5, column 795, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this documentation' or 'those documentations'?
Suggestion: this documentation; those documentations
...ion behind the every scenario is one of those documentation where both writing documentation or pre...
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Line 5, column 926, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[1]
Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
... a video playing in front made superior than only video documentary. Admittedly...
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Line 9, column 551, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...f a criminal records in its best can be a best seller book of the year but it won...
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Line 9, column 603, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...r book of the year but it wont count as a evidence of the crime in any court. ...
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Line 13, column 97, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...t past or in the distant place where we cant observe the event directly, writing pla...
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Line 13, column 263, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...of that event. A video documentation of a event always miss the big idea and big ...
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Line 13, column 397, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ble to make video of the all aspects of a event. In writing documentation it can ...
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Line 17, column 217, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Quantitive
...best depict in the written documentary. quantitive prospect of education of learning or an...
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Line 21, column 153, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[1]
Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
...o conclude that one of them is superior than other in every aspects of life. In case...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, if, so, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2868.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 556.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15827338129 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85588840946 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94377597427 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444244604317 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 936.9 704.065955056 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.6486507087 60.3974514979 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.947368421 118.986275619 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.2631578947 23.4991977007 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.52631578947 5.21951772744 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0436726323151 0.243740707755 18% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0174281057936 0.0831039109588 21% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0222759934469 0.0758088955206 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0292542132654 0.150359130593 19% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165143970319 0.0667264976115 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 14.1392134831 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.8420337079 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.1743820225 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.24 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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